I have no idea where this is going, but this chapter is a good start to what I think will be an awesome story.
There weren't that many emotions in the first chapter, I only felt hatred and self-loathe. I admire a story that is gives off one emotion at a time because I hate it being all over the place. There are some, if not all, who pull that off.
I'd like to know her name soon. I don't know who she is but I know many could relate to her story. Slowly but steadily give out her background. I don't think there's anything else to work on because I think the style of writing is fab.
There weren't that many emotions in the first chapter, I only felt hatred and self-loathe. I admire a story that is gives off one emotion at a time because I hate it being all over the place. There are some, if not all, who pull that off.
I'd like to know her name soon. I don't know who she is but I know many could relate to her story. Slowly but steadily give out her background. I don't think there's anything else to work on because I think the style of writing is fab.