Tranquility - Comments

Oh my. This was something. Absolutely amazing. I was feeling her pain, and my mouth went dry. It was captivating, but I also dreaded the end. Beautiful. I don't really have the words...

It was the short summary that pulled me on this story. Something about the combination of the title, the cover art and the short summary told me 'click on this'.

The first few paragraphs told me that the main character had been through something bad and of course my mind started screaming things such as 'rape' or 'she's already dead' or 'holy crap the killers are right behind here'. That's usually the point where I give up on reading because I've already guessed the end but the fourth paragraph kept me in because it's so detailed but it's not graphic.

It gave me a sense of fear and pain that this person had without totally repelling me. And then they just kept coming and I was feeling kind of scared because the murder channel was playing on the TV and I was reading this and ya, know lots of murder.

The story ended on a good note though because it kept me wanting more like: who is Blithe, were the two sleeping together or did Blithe just have the hots for MC? Where are they at? But I was still happy with the happy ending for the person at the same time.

K, SO! Here goes number two!
I think you already know that horror/gore/whatever you'd categorise this as because I don't know and I'm a softie and yeah. But you should also know that I totally love this. My absolute favourite part is surprisingly not the ending, which I guess I thought it would be, but the fact that the senses slowly returned to Arielle. I especially love the fact that taste and smell returned at the same time because that's scientifically accurate, I think (I just finished reading a nonfiction book about the senses and the accuracy really appeals to my everything-has-to-be-accurate side). Ugh I just I really love how you focused each paragraph on that one sense, until of course Blithe shows up. And even then you continued your focus on the senses and I just really like that, because it's something I kind of struggle with when I write. I focus mostly on the seeing and not so much the everything else-ing.

This story is so descriptive and imagery filled. It's like I was actually the one in pain. It was wonderful.

You have a beautiful writing style that makes the story so much more... inticing. Even when I was trying to do something else, I couldn't take my eyes off the screen because it would mean I had to stop reading.

First thing I noticed is the layout is so simple and serene. Then I noticed how detailed and flawless your writing is. If this were any other story, I'd say it was too wordy, but the details made the story. I don't even know what to say about this. I'm actually kind of speechless about this because your descriptions were fantastic and everything was so perfect.

Plus this isn't relevant to your writing, but Blithe is the last name of my favorite Band of Brothers character. So that kind of made my night. But this was fantastic and so well-written.

I actually could see images playing through my mind. Like a twisted horror movie. I felt like I was her. Then of course, your writing style is amazing.

I really like how much emphasis you put on her body and the things she's feeling physically throughout the piece. I like that you explained all of the things she's feeling as she awakens and it's like the reader is waking up with her. I did notice in the first couple of paragraphs you used a lot of "My..." sentences, which makes sense because it's talking about her, but I would have liked a little bit more variation in the sentence structure towards the beginning. Other than that, I thought this was a really good piece and I love your writing style!

Good Lord this is good! Wow! You're an absolutely amazing writer! I love your work its so good omg! :') I love how the reader was in the same place as the character, completey confused, so when the senses came it made it easier to build up an image of what was happening! Pure bliss! I love it!

Good Lord this is good! Wow! You're an absolutely amazing writer! I love your work its so good omg! :') I love how the reader was in the same place as the character, completey confused, so when the senses came it made it easier to build up an image of what was happening! Pure bliss! I love it!

It's so descriptive that I actually felt I was there! Absolutely amazing! The actual plot built up very gradually so it wasn't overwhelming or loads of ideas bundled together. The descriptions were beautiful and you brought across so much emotion xxx

This was really really good! I liked how you used good imagery. I could picture what she was going through and how she felt!

Oh my gosh I loved that. I must admit I was a little confused at first but slowly I understood and I just... woah.

First off; I love the way you write. It’s quite different to what I usually read but I liked it. You have a great way of describing everything and some may say it’s a bad thing but I think it’s a great thing. I painted a vivid if not disturbing picture in my head but that’s only because I had no idea what was going on until Blithe explained.

That’s the other thing; the plot. I am so caught up in it! I wanna read about what Arielle had been doing and why she slept around! It’s such a good story idea!

And the last thing I loved was the last sentence;

This was tranquility.
Perfect

This is just amazing, I swear.

This was absolutely amazing. I loved the wording and the imagery that you created. I'm just speechless.