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Please update its wonderful c:

It's been 2 months, will you please update!??

why you no update D:

Update pleeease

omg this is really funny! I love it! Update! C:

@ holli_simba
thank you so much! i'll definitely try to work on the typos and such. i was checking over it to make sure i liked the way everything was, and i did notice that it was a little hard to read, but i just have no idea how to do a banner if we're being honest. thank you for the feedback!

This story definitely has potential!

That being said, I'm waaaaay to OCD to read this without proper capitalization XD You know,things like the word "I" being capitalized, the first word of every sentence, etc. I love your word choice when you're describing things; I love when people use words that aren't as common as others in their writing! It absolutely makes my heart do flips if I have to actually stop and look up a word that someone's used in their story. However, I'm such an English junkie, so not everyone feels that way. Lol Your writing is very good, and your grammar is wonderful (aside from minor typos and things of the sort).

As for the background, it's a little hard to read. I honestly try to shy away from the transparent content box, especially if there's an actual background in the "background" section. I love the image that you used for the background, but I feel like you could almost use it as a banner or something instead of the background image. I'm only saying these things because it was a bother to try and read the dark font against it (:

I subscribed and recommended it, because I truly think that this will be worth reading! Can't wait to see where it goes, and what shenanigans Kell gets into!