Unnamed Men - Comments

@ laredo.
Thank you so much!
I'm not very good at writing dialogue, for some reason. If you go through my stories, most of them have absolutely no dialogue and, when they do, it's very short. I think my description skills surpass my dialogue skills by far

I really don't know what to say about this story because I loved it so much. The plot was so sad, and I definitely felt a lot of emotion for the characters you wrote up here. If you can make me physically feel emotion for the characters in your story, then that's a sign of an amazing writer.

You wrote the story well without dialogue, and I think it was nice that it didn't have any. It kind of works like a silent film in the reader's mind, because you give so much description. But even though you give a lot of description, it isn't overdone. It's sufficient enough to tell a story without dragging it out or making it boring.

Well done. I love you, and I now love your writing.

@ fascination.
The layout was made by Nikki, actually. She makes really pretty layouts!

As for the rest of your comment, thank you so much for the compliments, they're greatly appreciated.
I'm bisexual and I can say I've experienced a lot of discrimination myself, perhaps even more than if I were gay, because people still think that being attracted to both sexes means I'm a slut who would fuck just about anything that walks. It's sad.
People point out often how other countries are racist, homophobic and xenophobic and forget to look at their own. In South Korea, being homosexual is almost a crime. Even in countries where it's legal to get married (like Portugal, where I live), it's like there is still a stigma attached to it, like having any sexual orientation other than straight is disgusting. Oh world...!

Thank you again for the comment!

The layout is so gorgeous my gosh you're amazing! Would you mind teaching me how to make the background like that? Please :)?

Now to the fantastic story you have here. The idea of this story is quite sad because it's obvious these two men are quite in love! I can definitely relate to this story because I have many gay friends and am gay myself and you definitely displayed the awkwardness of public affection perfectly. Also, it makes the whole story much more sad because they serve their country. For that, they should get endless respect, not shameful looks. Furthermore, I love stories that have an amazing plot and carry it out without using dialogue and you DEFINITELY achieved that. Your writing is absolutely beautiful!

This is the part where I point out mistakes or anything that I believe the writer should fix, but you don't have any! You have an amazing story here :D!

The layout is so gorgeous my gosh you're amazing! Would you mind teaching me how to make the background like that? Please :)?

Now to the fantastic story you have here. The idea of this story is quite sad because it's obvious these two men are quite in love! I can definitely relate to this story because I have many gay friends and am gay myself and you definitely displayed the awkwardness of public affection perfectly. Also, it makes the whole story much more sad because they serve their country. For that, they should get endless respect, not shameful looks. Furthermore, I love stories that have an amazing plot and carry it out without using dialogue and you DEFINITELY achieved that. Your writing is absolutely beautiful!

This is the part where I point out mistakes or anything that I believe the writer should fix, but you don't have any! You have an amazing story here :D!

@ Fair
OMG THANK YOU

The layout was actually made by the gorgeous Nikki

But I'm so glad you liked it ^^

@ Fair
OMG THANK YOU

The layout was actually made by the gorgeous Nikki

But I'm so glad you liked it ^^

I absolutely adore this.
I love the layout and how different it looks, and how it's just a little bit off but it looks amazing. I think tied in with the words you wrote for this story, it could be one of my favorite stories/layouts on the site. Easily.

The repetitiveness of the isn't ready and wasn't ready parts of this story made me smile. I love the way you used these words to get your point across very clearly and how it made the impact of this writing much stronger.

I feel there was a lot of feeling, emotion and thought put into this piece and it really shone through with the writing. There was nothing that wasn't worked well into the whole thing and the flow was spectacular.

As I said, this could easily be one of my favorite stories on Mibba because it is so beautifully written and anonymous, these two men could be anyone and I feel as though so many could relate to this, if not have been through this. This story is one I feel should be framed, talked about, promoted because it's wonderful and I'm glad I read it.

@ mia san mia.
Thank you
Hana (하나) just means one, I thought it'd be a nice touch.

I liked that you chose to write about a taboo subject in South Korea and how much of a struggle it is for homosexual people. I feel like a lot of slashes set in this country don't acknowledge how unaccepted it is by the general population and how hard it can be for gay people to deal with. So I really liked that you wrote about homophobia.

I'll also say I found this story quite powerful as well, especially the part where you described that one of the men had to give up his dream of being an actor because he didn't think he could cope having to hide who he is. But I like that you coupled with that the other man's dream to teach children English so they could be exposed to a less judgemental world outside of South Korea.

Keeping them nameless was a wonderful choice. I feel like that makes them more relatable. You can imagine anyone in their position and by not giving them full identities, you make them representations of all homosexuals and what they go through.

One criticism I have is I know the contest prompt asked you to incorporate culture somehow and while you did that, I wish there was a bit more. I understand homosexuality is frowned upon and something to be ashamed of in South Korea, but I feel that is common of several countries and cultures all around the world. It isn't something that really places this story in South Korea and I actually had no idea where it was set until the very last line of the story. The other facts you threw in didn't help me distinguish what culture you were writing about either.

Overall, this was a very lovely piece. I'm curious what 하나 translates to now though.

@ breezes.
Oh, stop it you *melts into a puddle of goo*
Thank you

yes, I typed it on my phone, like literally everything I post on this website

This was very, very powerful. I really like that you not only included South Korean culture, complimenting it and pointing out its flaws at the same time, but centered it around a gay couple. The combination of those two themes really made for a powerful image.

The fact that the whole story centers around them being unnamed, anonymous because of their relationship, it's really powerful.

In a country where about thirteen people out of one thousand have undergone plastic surgery, where women and men alike struggle to stay slim, where being overweight is almos a crime, where people worry so much about the outside, it seems obvious that kids are going to be raised believing that anything outside the norm is ugly and, therefore, despisable. Those two men, that shall remain unnamed, felt despisable for the simple fact that they chose to live their love and make it official.

That's my favorite bit, I think. A lot of power packed into just that little bit.

I would like to see a layout but I understand your limitations. Did you type this all out on your phone?

Thanks for entering!