To France With Love - Comments

I got here from comment swap. First of all, I've never read a tennis story, so that was cool! I like your plot, it's original and honestly I just think it's a good idea. I liked how you wrote this although it needs some work. I noticed numerous grammatical mistakes along with some spelling ones, so proof reading this more is absolutely essential. But it was pretty good. Just try have someone proofread before you submit.

I got here from comment swap. First of all, I've never read a tennis story, so that was cool! I like your plot, it's original and honestly I just think it's a good idea. I liked how you wrote this although it needs some work. I noticed numerous grammatical mistakes along with some spelling ones, so proof reading this more is absolutely essential. But it was pretty good. Just try have someone proofread before you submit.

Comment Swap:

I really don't know anything about tennis or the characters but I found it interesting.

The layout is simple which I enjoy. Too much going on can be distracting.

Use other words than said: stated, remarked, etc. I also saw some errors, just read through before you post!
:)

@ Emmol
haha not yet :) I got a little sidetracked with other things I've been working on! (Like my first ever non fan fiction story I've posted on the site!)

Hey! I really love your story! Do you know when you'll post "Love in London" ?

I loved the update! I love these two together and I hope they survive the distance! Post more soon!

I really like this story, I never thought I'd think Rafa was 'cute' but this story gives me that opinion. Can't wait to read more :)

Comment Swap brought me here!

First off, good job on writing a tennis story because I don't see them ever. Mibba needs some love for the other sports, you know? I don't really watch tennis, but I like to play it since I have courts right outside my apartment building, so. Also I kind of laughed when I saw Maria's name because I'm a hockey fan and everybody knows Alex Ovechkin started dating her a little while ago. So kudos to you for mentioning him.

Anyway, to the actual criticism...this was okay. You're good at telling a story. The only things I would tell you is to use 'said' less and to proofread a lot more. Otherwise than that, continue. I see a lot of potential in this.

I got here from comment swap. First of all, I've never read a tennis story, so that was cool! I like your plot, it's original and honestly I just think it's a good idea. I liked how you wrote this although it needs some work. I noticed numerous grammatical mistakes along with some spelling ones, so proof reading this more is absolutely essential. I cannot tell you how annoying it is to see mistakes when you're trying really hard to read a piece.

omg i love the idea of this story. keep it up!! can't wait to read more :))

*Comment Swap*
So first off, I like your idea with this story. I play tennis myself so thats cool that I was led to a tennis story! I think that you have a good first chapter, but it does need some improvement. I saw some grammar and spelling errors throughout the chapter! Make sure you proof read and spell check your story multiple times before posting!