Kites - Comments

@ SecretPiggyMafia
Oh aw you cutie, that's okay then! ahah

@ earthtoamy

They were tears of joy.

@ SecretPiggyMafia
Aw ahaha this wasn't supposed to be that sad omg :') Glad you liked it though, xx

Aww... so cute made me cry. I'm so glad they found each other again.

You're very welcome

@ Maddi;
Awesome! Thank you so much for your feedback, I really appreciate all the help I can get!

Yes, that looks way better!

@ Maddi;
Would you mind having another look? I believe I fixed it!

@ Maddi;
Oh, okay! Thank you very much!

It's just supposed to be like this how there is an empty space between each new paragraph!

@ Maddi;
Thank you so much for you feedback!
I'm not sure what you mean by block formatting? Nor double spacing...could I see an example of it please? So that I can fix it.
Yes I tried to make it sad. So to start sad and then have a happier spin to it towards the end, I suppose. but thank you very much! That was thereaction I was aiming for!

Okay, the first thing I noticed was that you didn't have your paragraphs in block formatting. There needs to be a double space after each new paragraph, because it makes it easier for people to read and it is also one of Mibba's rules.
Overall, I thought this was really sad! I feel so bad that poor little May didn't even get to live for two weeks and then Silvia had to deal with the death of all of her loved ones. I think you did a good job of blending the past and the present and I like that we were able to get a lot of Silvia's back story as well as a lot from the present!

@ jade-
Thank you so much! I pride myself on that, I thought it sounded smart aha.
This really means a lot, thank you :)

Firstly I love how you incorporated the metaphor of Silvy being a kite. Secondly I have great respect for people who can write one-shots, because I struggle so much to write them, and you did a great job. This was a sweet story that I enjoyed reading, and I'm sure many others will too. Keep up the great work :)

Firstly I love how you incorporated the metaphor of Silvy being a kite. Secondly I have great respect for people who can write one-shots, because I struggle so much to write them, and you did a great job. This was a sweet story that I enjoyed reading, and I'm sure many others will too. Keep up the great work :)

@ d3ja-ent3ndu
Thank you so much! This means a lot! xx

I come here from comment swap!

I just wanted to let you know that this was quite good! I liked the plot line of the one shot and how you tied it together at the very end, that was clever. I like your use of words. Everyday words tend to become very monotonous and I'm glad that you strayed away from them because it made this all the better!

All in all, great job m'dear. c:

@ strawberrybubble
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. xx

@ LoveForGiraffes
If I didn't enter the contest I would've never written this in the first place! Ahah
Thank you so much c:
I was going for that! I'm glad you liked it, x

I'm so glad that you entered my contest, because if you didn't then I wouldn't have read this cute little story! I really like the plot of this. It wasn't cliche or overdone, it was short, sweet, and made me go aww =]. Great job dear, I really enjoyed reading this! I'm posting the winners as soon as I'm done judging =]