Not for This Earth - Comments

That's kind of fucked up that they keep a loaded gun in the house. Makes you wonder if the dad had the same idea as the young man or he's just incredibly paranoid. I like that even though it's in third person it still manages to portray how the MC perceives himself. So...he was an angel who was given the chance to go see what humanity was like? That's interesting. Very interesting take on abortion and what happens to those children.

The simple one sentence summary caught my attention quick, and I was rather curious what this would be about. At first, I thought it would be like other suicide stories I have read about, but this one was interesting and different.

The thought that he was allowed to see how his life played out for a little bit if he had been born was something I liked. The beginning was smooth, and the descriptions fit nicely with the story as well. Also, your grammar is good too. I enjoyed how you've played out the role of abortion and put in the thought of if the baby was ever born, would it become something and help the world? I've never read something like this, and your story is well written too! This definitely could be a story that can be elaborated on, but I think I like it as it is now as well.