Great writing!! I hated to see Jordan being such a prick:(
October 6th, 2013 at 03:00am
HIs eyes look super blue in your banner thingy..holy hell I love that! lol
I liked that you sort of made me hate Jordan in this...If you go to my stories, you know I heart the Staals lol so making me want to punch them takes a lot...you did that lol...Stupid Jordan!
I would have really liked to see how Jordan and Heather's relationship changed over the years; like did she notice anything? did she find out about him and Eli?
Also, for future reference, your tense changed a lot from past to present. Just watch that. It's a problem a lot of people have, so you're not alone. I catch myself doing it from time to time so I can't really preach to anyone haha
Also, the winners should be posted on the contest page in a couple of hours, so go check that out :)