The Sirens Of Jefferson Drive - Comments

Without even clicking onto the first chapter, the summary has already got me hooked. It's a little overdone, but it did well of drawing me in so I'm not really complaining I am a sucker for summer stories, and I'm excited to see where this one goes!

Holy crap. I was not expecting that prologue at all. What I expected to be a fun summer story starts immediately with death and I'm shocked. I'm curious to see what happened before this point, so off to chapter one I go!

It's easy to say that I love this story already. Chapter One had great descriptions, and I liked that I could picture the scene in my head as I read along. All of the girls so far seem cool and exciting, and it's going to be interesting to see how their summer unfolds and whatnot. Definitely subscribing and I can't wait for more!

Right off your prologue sucked me in, making me wanting to read more. I'm eager to find out how you're planning to get them to that situation. Your layout is very simple and pretty, although a little small for my liking. Your descriptions are good and your writing flows quite well. Very mysterious indeed! Well done.

i'm excited for this!

I like the picture that you used and the summary is a bit intriguing, especially since it has a little twist on the cliche version of most road trip or summer beach house stories. I'm not a big fan of the black borders in the layout it just seems a little bit much and doesn't really match with the rest of the layout.

Sand blew up into their eyes; making it hard to see their struggling friend.
The semicolon isn't really necessary since it isn't two complete sentences, the second part isn't an independent clause so I think maybe you should rearrange the sentence so that you don't need the semicolon.

For some reason, the preface really reminds me of Pretty Little Liars. I'm not really familiar with the show nor have I ever watched it but my friends discuss it in front of me all the time and that's what I remembered when thinking about this.

This story definitely does hold some promise and the first chapter is very well written and had a nice flow to it so i'm really curious as to what's going to happen when Caroline calls up the boys and I'm so lost as to why the girl threw herself into the water in the preface lol. Crazy things definitely happen when there are teenagers together with no supervision lol. So, I liked it the description was nice and the preface added a lot of mystery so that this wasn't the typical crazy summer story. Good job so far guys! :)

@ kim kibum.
Thanks! The first chapter should be up very shortly :D

This shows some real promise! Keep up the good work!!! (:

This shows some real promise! Keep up the good work!!! (: