The Tale of Constance Hasting - Comments

I went ahead and read all the chapters you have up and I'm very curious to see where this goes! I wonder how the forest and her uncle can help her. How does the good and evil one tie together and how do the spirits expect her to set them free? Just as Maddi; mentioned, it's just some punctuation errors that can be fixed, but other than that, I'm looking forward to see where you take this story. :]

I think your concept for this story is very interesting. I like the idea for monsters and all that, and I think you're doing an excellent job so far! I can tell you have a very vivid imagination and it shows in your writing. This is a really lovely plot so far, but there are a few things I see that could use some work.

The biggest thing I noticed is that you overuse semicolons a lot. Some places it looks like there could just be a period instead of the semicolon, and other places it looks like there needs to be a comma.

I'll show you some examples.

I don’t know where they came from, all I know is that if they catch me.

I am safe here inside my warm room, sitting on my bed surrounded by my blankets I’ve had since childhood.

My eyes fly to my door and I stare at it, willing it to lock itself and never open.

Standing in the shadows of the hallway, four feet from my door is a man.

Anyway, this is a great story and I think if you run it through editing, it could be even better!