THANK YOU!!!!
August 20th, 2013 at 05:47am
Though layouts are not incredibly important, in this case, I feel the need to start with it. I read the first chapter, but only the first chapter because the font for the story is very small. My eyes aren't perfect and it was a bit of a struggle for me. However, I wouldn't be surprised if it's my Internet browser either. So if it is a normal font size, ignore this part.
As for the actual story, it is quite good. Most band stories have a completely cliche ending, but from your writing so far, I think you will be able to write it just fine. Even from the first chapter, I feel for the main character. It's not so much a sorrow feeling, but almost like I understand him. The way you show how vulnerable he actually is really makes him easy to relate to.
The story is labeled as fan fiction, but I don't know the band. I can't entirely make a judgement on whether the characters are similar to their real life people, but they do not sound like fake, perfect "story people".
Overall, you are doing wonderful. I will subscribe in hopes that the font size with either be increased or a different browser will change it. Once again, wonderful job!
