To Live Is Just to Fall Asleep - Comments

by far the best fan fic I've ever ever read!! your way with words and writing is incredible :)

So like a few others I found this story on comment swap and I'm glad I did! I love Ellie as a character. Already I've been captivated by her. Personally I don't like Vic, but that's just me. Your style is realistic and I think you really have a talent not many people have being able to write relatable stories that are still realistic. Great job and don't wait to keep going!

So comment swap brought me here! Normally i dont read fics but i cant help but think this one is very well written. I love PTV haha but i have never rad any of the fics about them. What caught my eye was your summary. It was very well written and it drew me in! I hope to see more of your work! I write an original story on my account, i dont know if you read original fiction, but it would be awesome if you checked it out! I cant wait to see more of your work! :D

@ jade- Ah! Thank you so much! I cannot express my gratitude (: And I have not changed the font! I like it. But thank you for that reassurance lol. But seriously, thank you so much!

I love your summary to begin with. Your use of rhetorical question really made me stop and think about what you are saying, and it definitely drew in my attention.

I am not usually a large fan of first person writing, but the way you execute it is perfect, especially considering your swaps between each character. Your ability to describe situations is also perfect! Good work. Also, I'm unsure if you've altered the layout since the previous comment, but I had no problem reading the font :)

@ Snow.White.Queen. I'm glad you found it easy to follow! I'm very happy that you enjoy my writing c: But I apologize for the small writing! To me it just looks nicer. But everyone is different! Thank you for the wonderful comment c:

I'm here from comment swap.

Firstly I don't really read PTV fan fictions or listen to them much, so at first I was slightly worried that I'd have to be a fan to understand this story. But I did in fact understand it haha.
I love the layout, although the writing is just a tad too small for my liking. I love your descriptions and how this story flows. You have an amazing style or witting and I'm really looking forward to reading more from you!

@ verrloren. Thank you so much c: It means a lot. I'm glad you felt this was different.

First off, I'm not usually into band fanfiction. I'll be honest. I rarely listen to Pierce the Veil either. BUT that doesn't matter, because I still like this story. I like how you started it off, describing the influence of fate in everyday life. It pulled me in right away. I usually don't like when it switches point of views, but I like hearing Vic's point of view as well. It adds a nice dynamic to the story.

I think I might actually continue reading this one.

@ eminems_ Thank you so much! And thank you, I will look into setting that apart as a chapter!

From comment swap again i got one of your other stories through here as well. Spelling and grammar is perfect from what i can see. The layout is great don't worry about using the pre made ones they're for everyone to use. I've used and made some myself. Anyway, i felt the preface was way too long for a preface it felt like a chapter. Your writing is really great and easy to follow. I recommend for you too. :)

@ Chopper-kun Oh my gosh thank you so much! Hahaha. I love your feedback, it's making me all fluttery on the inside lol. And lol I know, freakin' Ellis. But thank you bunches! I hope you continue to read c:

You are an amazing author! I just love your description on the surrounding and the characters' emotions. I can feel and see what you're trying to show.

I like the flow of the first chapter, the intro that got me wondering about what is gonna happen, and then that video call that I think is just so sweet. Then Ellis sees that picture on the net. Ellis, you should know better than to believe everything from the net. And then, the outburst and the accident. The end of chapter one left me wanting more!

Then I read the second chapter. I could feel Vic's feelings and at first I just sat here reading and then when the rest of the band came and tried to comfort him, I didn't know why but I just cried. It's just so sad, you know?

@ selfish machine Your comments are seriously making my night! And the layout of this story might be a little confusing until I really get into it, so here's a run-down: the chapters are going to alternate between a flashback of a memory Ellie had with Vic and Vic in present time dealing with the struggle of the accident. If you enjoy that I incorporated the lyrics, you will absolutely love this because in every chapter, I will do so! It's there, even if it's subtle. But don't feel like an asshole! I am absolutely and utterly thrilled that you are even taking the time to read this, let alone comment. So thank you, really c: And I have not seen this gif! I have a feeling that if I ever stumble upon it, I will be pissed. I hate fans like that too, with all my heart. But as far as Ellie dying, you'll just have to wait and see c; I can't guarantee anything, and a few tears just might be shed. But you'll see, m'dear. But Selfish Machines is my favorite album too! Their sophomore release blew my mind. Their techniques and ways of playing compliments each one of them individually and as a whole, and that's probably my most favorite album of music in general. Truly astounding, their music. But seriously, thank you so much. I can't express my gratitude on your feedback. It's seriously heart warming.

I feel like such an asshole now. I'm honestly ashamed of myself for being so quick to assume that Vic cheated without hearing (or in this case, reading) his side of the story. Wow, I definitely feel like an asshole right now.

It annoys me to no end when fans get too up close and personal with celebrities. It is so incredibly rude. I remember last year, around the time that Warped was ending, there was a gif going around on tumblr of a fan of PTV who walked up to Vic, grabbed his face, and planted one on him. I was livid when I saw that gif. The fact that some people have so little respect for someone that they claim to "love" is mind-boggling to me.

I want to be optimistic and hold on to hope that Ellie will wake up, I really do. But the fact that the nurse said that it would take a miracle for her to wake up makes it really difficult to stay upbeat about the situation. It just doesn't seem fair that Ellie will (most likely) be dying without knowing the truth of what happened between Vic and that fan. And it doesn't seem fair that Vic has to go through life knowing that Ellie (most likely) died thinking that he was a cheating scumbag. I don't want to be one of those readers that demands a happy ending, but... Please don't make Ellie die thinking that Vic's a cheating scumbag. Or actually, please don't make Ellie die at all!

The flashback was so precious. The friendship between Vic and Ellie is definitely swoon-worthy. I loved the line about how Ellie would do anything for Vic because she knew that he would do the same for her. To be able to share that kind of relationship with another person must be amazing. And I loved how you tied the lyrics from "Southern Constellations" and "The Boy Who Could Fly" into the chapter. Those two songs are definitely in my top five favorite PTV songs (Selfish Machines as whole is my favorite album, actually.) and it's always fun to read something that incorporates them into the writing.

@ selfish machine Ah! Thank you so very much! The first two chapters are indeed posted c: Your comment is exactly what I look for when asking for feedback! I can't thank you enough for your kind words, dear c:

This is fantastic! Your writing style is lovely. I have the feeling that this is going to be one of those stories that, when I read it, I'll want to scream to the heavens, asking why I can't write as well as you.

The beginning of this chapter was so sweet. Vic does seem like such the hopeless romantic, and that's one of the main things I love about him. You can definitely tell that when you're in a relationship with him, he's going to treat you right (for the most part).

...But then he had to go and screw it up by being a little slutty Mcslut. I was looking forward to a cute little date scene, but instead, Vic had to go and ruin it. I'm so mad he cheated on Ellie and then tried to deny it when she brought it up. I just...I cannot deal with his nonsense right now.

And then the end of the chapter threw me for a loop! I wasn't expecting them to get into an accident. Even though I'm very upset with him right now, I found it very sweet how Vic made a point of holding Ellie's hand as the collision occurred. It shows that they still care very much about each other, even though Vic cheated.

All in all, I loved this chapter a lot and can't wait to read more!