Jeans of a Star - Comments

I miss this story, like a lot!

this story gives meaning to my life and the next time you update, i might have to comment in all caps

Commenting on the first two chapters, as promised.

Okay, so I don't know anything about Dave Franco, which made me sorta read this more like an original fiction. I still enjoyed it though. I think my favorite thing about your writing style is the way you establish character voice, namely El's voice. I really enjoyed reading her narration, with all her attitude and her interesting way of describing and observing things. You really made me feel like I was in her head for a bit.
Now to quote/point out some things I found noteworthy:
She was hardly pretty enough to be related to a God like him.(from Ch. 1) -In this context, you would not need to capitalize "god" since you are not referring to a specific god, like the proper noun "God". You are describing Justin Timberlake as being like a god, not saying he is literally God, see?
I didn’t blame him, though, because blaming him was a hell of a lot harder than pretending nothing had happened at all.(from Ch. 1) -I really like this line, and honestly I relate a lot to it because that tends to be how I deal with interpersonal relationship issues or at least it is one step I tend to go through.
They batted their eyes at him with those big, spider eyelashes, while their crocodile-like claws gripped onto his arms.(from Ch. 1) - I like the animal imagery used here.
I had spent countless amounts of time in that kitchen in the years before Dave got famous making pizza rolls and popcorn, but... (from, I think, Ch. 1)- There should be a comma after "famous" to separate the thoughts (unless he got famous making pizza rolls, which is, I'm sure, not the case.)
I’d be in a prison gang gripping onto my soap for dear life. (also from, I think, Ch. 1) -Similarly, there should be a comma separating "gang" and "gripping".
... he had that ever-so-charming smile that made girls like Anna Cartwright’s hearts melt. (from Ch. 2) - I love how El uses the phrase "girls like Anna Cartwright" when it's pretty clear she has feelings (or is developing feelings) for Dave.

Overall, I would say I enjoyed what I read of this piece, even though it's not exactly the type of story I normally seek out. Keep up the good work!

Okay so I'm not overly knowledgable when it comes to Dave Franco, however I do like this story! I only read the first three chapters but even from that you get a great feel for the story! Your description and flow is awesome, and I love that you've kept it real and not over exaggerated the whole celebrity aspect! all in all good job :)

Miss this. x

Please please update. I just found this and I love it and I NEED to read more

It's really been almost a month... Wow

I love it update soon!

I can't wait for the next update!

As a part of the monster comments, I decided to read one of your stories to post on, and was surprised when I found this story. I have loved James Franco forever, and his brother is almost as hilarious. I love his Teen Vogue cover shoot and his part in 21 Jump street.
That being said, I can picture the scenes you describe in your chapters, and can picture the laughing and party. Good job at that. El's friend sounds crazy loose, and I'd like to see more of her. I am looking forward to the rest, and am subscribing.

Ohhhhhh my god are you trying to kill me?! And well done for getting into dental school by the way

*falls on the ground from cuteness*

OH THESE TWO <3

MEEPS OH MY GOD THAT IS SO CUTE AHHHH

YYYYYYYYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAAAAAYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! i freaking love this story

Yes yes yes yes! I can't wait to see what happens next!

AHHHH that was perf(:

CAN I JUST SAY IM IN LOVE

Oh my goodness I loved that update!
Finally Dave!!

DAVE FINALLY I WAS GONNA BE PISSED AT HIM