Elise - Comments

Oh, I just love this! Everything about her is so down played that I can't help but just loving the homely girl! I cannot wait for more! Subscribed and loved and just...oh, I love this (=^.^=)

Oh, this is a charming little story. I was actually really intrigued by the summary, because I love the idea of foreign characters, especially those who speak fluent German.

From the start, you captured my attention. From the first sentence, you characterize her so perfectly. She's so unique in the way that she isn't unique and I love that about her. She's so realistic. But the cool thing about the narrator is that they aren't either. They're just too normal people, and I love it.

The first chapter might seem a bit boring to other people, but I like it. It's a simple chapter, which fits the fact that Elise didn't capture his attention. It was just a fleeting moment. Well done!

I fell in love.

Man, you know what? I love how freaking homely and unspecial she sounds. Usually writers try to make their characters special snowflakes and they have that "you don't know you're beautiful" thing going on about them. I don't always like that because it doesn't always work. I really like her, because she's realistic. Not everyone is as perfect as people try to make characters sound. I like Elise because she's flawed. The amount of detail you put into this is extraordinarily beautiful, verging on flowery. There's a thin line between just enough and too much detail and you're on the right side, though I think if you're not cautious, you could cross said line. But who cares about that for now? This is a great start. I'm very interested to see how this... hot mess... of a girl makes an impact on the narrator. (S)he doesn't sound very special either, which doubly makes me happy. I'm so ready for a story that has just average, plain people instead of out of this world people. I can't stress enough how real and relatable it makes this story and why it's going to stand out. ❤

I love this story. It was so light and sweet. I love the way you describe your character. I didn't know, cause maybe I missed it, that it was a Bundesliga fiction and that makes it even more interesting.

i love Elise so much. Everything about her screams imperfect but that's what makes her so lovely; she isn't this stereotypical gorgeous girl you find in stories and i think everyone relates to her in that way. In addition, your writing is beyond lovely and I can't wait to see what this story shall bring :D

It's finally here.

I must admit, I do love the way you describe Elise, both in the summary and the prologue. Rather than pointing out the good things, you point out all the negatives, which is a really unusual and interesting way to do it. I don't see enough plain lead characters, so Elise is a welcome and refreshing change to that. She's awkward and seems slightly clumsy, which only makes her seem more real to me as a reader and I think that's great. I'm sure most people who wear mascara can relate to her incident as well, so that was a really nice touch.

I also absolutely adore the way you're writing this. The first line is really good, it hooked me straight in. Quite mysterious, really. Kind of gives Elise this mysterious air to her person which I think is brilliant.

I really don't have any complaints. Brilliantly written, very intriguing. There really isn't enough football fanfiction on Mibba and I am so looking forward to reading the rest of this!

I really like how you described her like that.