Book One: The Sorcerer's Stone - Comments

@ Maddi;
Thank you so much!

I thought the opening line was just brilliant. It's the perfect way to start off a story by saying something intriguing that shoots into the writer right off of the bat. I like that you wrote this for anyone and you don't have to know much about Harry Potter to read this story. You even went as far as to explain the family dyanmics of the Weasleys and each of their names for anyone who doesn't know them, and I really like that you added Tonks as a character and that Ellie calls her her auntie. I thought that was really sweet and endearing. Keep up the great work!

@ writingismypassion23
oh my god, thank you so much! I'm like, crying of joy right now! That was the best thing I've read on any of my stories! Thank you!

Ohhhhh myyyyyy gooooodddnessssssssssssss

This is SUCH a good story. My gosh, some of your lines or details are just so perfect I think it makes everyone on Mibba jealous! You introduced your character so nicely and I love how she applies herself to the situation. THIS is how you write an exposition!! A job well done!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia

@ Maddi;
Thanks so much for your comment! I'm glad to know that this story is good for some people.

Wonderful

@ Snow.White.Queeen. Thanks for the comment! I'm so glad you like the story!

Comment Swap let me here.
So firstly your layout is nice! It's not too bright and it's easy on my eyes, so I liked that. Secondly, when you said group of red - heads I couldn't help but laugh, that's just such a good way to describe a family
Although I don't like Harry Potter, I found this easy to follow so far, so that's nice. Keep going, I can't wait for more!

*COMMENT SWAP*

Hello there! Let me tell you that I was pleasantly surprised when I was given a Harry Potter story to review! I'm rarely given any story that I am familiar with.

1) I like your layout. It makes me think of Hogwarts, and it is not too overwhelming or bright!
2) I very much like the plot line so far, it of course has me asking all sorts of questions like: Who is Ella's father? Sirius Black!?

You write well! The preface is a bit short, but then again it's a preface! It is great that you only tell us a little bit of background story, leaving so much room for mystery. And what's a Harry Potter story without a little mystery.

You captured my intrigue with your main character and her story. I'll be subscribing and looking forward to an update!

Good luck, and keep writing!

*COMMENT SWAP*

Hello there! Let me tell you that I was pleasantly surprised when I was given a Harry Potter story to review! I'm rarely given any story that I am familiar with.

1) I like your layout. It makes me think of Hogwarts, and it is not too overwhelming or bright!
2) I very much like the plot line so far, it of course has me asking all sorts of questions like: Who is Ella's father? Sirius Black!?

You write well! The preface is a bit short, but then again it's a preface! It is great that you only tell us a little bit of background story, leaving so much room for mystery. And what's a Harry Potter story without a little mystery.

You captured my intrigue with your main character and her story. I'll be subscribing and looking forward to an update!

Good luck, and keep writing!

Harry Potter fan fiction! AH, As soon as I saw the title of this on the comment swap feature man I was excited.

This has a great, and I mean great plot line to it, It's not your regular, Hermione or Ron P.O.V, it's a new character of an existing character, so I love it! This is something I would love to read and the preface was the best I've seen so far because people don't include the backstory, they just list a bunch of emotions but your pre-face was great, it gave off a backstory and it connected to the reader.

Great job. Good luck. Subscribed and recommended.
P.S Sorry if I'm not making sense, it's 5:30 AM. :P