Lust - Comments

It was story but the ending just seem to fall flat.

its good but sometimes is doesn't quite make sense

I've only read the first chapter so I'll add a MUCH more substantial comment later but what I can say right now is maybe make the prince say something really really vain and horrible at first because him just saying: I live in a bigger mansion, a palace, isn't that bad and her snapping at that seems a bit over the top. On the good side... WOW GREAT STORY completely hooked so far! Love your layout, writing, idea, completely hooked. Great job :)

Update as soon as possible(:

Please update soon(:

I don't like Logan he seems like BAD NEWS! Hadley is going to get in major trouble hanging with him!!

Hmmm. I don't like Logan. He needs to disappear.

Just started reading this and I love it. I can't wait to read more.

I love love love this. Pleeeeeeaasse write as fast as possible :)

@ Skeezyr
Thank you! :)

@ unmade beds
Thank you for your feedback! I went in and fixed the dialogue on the last chapter. Thank you :)

hey i just found this and its quite interesting just make sure when you write their speech (like a conversation) you really differentiate who is talking its a little confusing. Oh and why is he impersonating the prince, nice twist :D

Looking forward for this one'! Nice prolouge