Dramione - Comments

This was an extremely different take on the Harry Potter world, I have to say. I can see the appeal to this couple, but I would never think of them this way haha.

It is pretty short, even for a one shot. I'd like to see some things expanded on some more. Draco seems to be a lot out of character, so that kind of subtracts from my like of it, since I like the way he originally is.

Otherwise, it's a pretty cute story!

@ Snow.White.Queen.
Thanks for the comment. :)

Meh, I like this story, but it's not one of my favorites from you. I do like it, but seeing the layout and reading the title, frankly I felt a little bored and not at all excited to read this. I'm not at all into Harry Potter, but I'll admit that these two seem very very cute together! I like the paragraph breaker you used near the middle too, just to add that haha. I think you could use more description in there, but from what you have, I do like it. I'll say well done to you for this one shot, I am very sorry if I seemed to come off harsh at the beginning of my comment, it was not intended!

@ Jefferson Starships
Okay, thanks for the comment

I just feel sad that I couldn't appreciate this story. I've never read or seen Harry Potter, neither do I know much about it. I thought this story was simply drab, it could use more detail to development. Even without that, though, I could still see how fond Draco is of Hermione.

Title: 0/5
Layout: 4/5
Grammar: 3/5
Overall Story: 3/5

I love Dramione as a couple, they're one of my favorite ships. I could tell that you are a talented writer, but this story was sort of off track. I believe that none of this story sounded like Draco. He would never call himself an idiot, and using a Muggle computer is something that he might be repulsed by. I like the style of your writing and how simple it is, but you might want to do some research next time. Good luck!

@ midnight sunshine x
Thank you so much!

I have never read a fan-fiction about these two as a couple, they are so good together! It's an amazing concept and I think it would be great as a chaptered story! You really portrayed Draco as someone with more feeling than in the books, his good side was only touched upon in the original novels. Really sweet and very well written xxx recommended!

@ Parasite
Thank you so much!

Aww, this was so cute. Honestly, I shipped them when Hermione punched him in the face haha. This was adorable and cute, it was a fast read but I enjoyed it nonetheless.

@ yukinoshita yukino;
Thank you so much! (You made my day )
I may turn this into a chaptered story, but I'm not sure yet. I'll let you know if I do!

Draco and Hermione! I always had a soft spot for this couple. :3 I think I would have liked to hear a bit from Hermione's side of the story, but other than that it was a nice, sweet read. I'd love it if you maybe wrote a longer, chaptered story about how the events actually went down. If you ever feel like it, at least. :D Keep writing!

@ tabula rasa.
Thank you so much!
I was thinking about turning this into a longer story, and I might.

Simple, but I liked it! Even though it was short, I liked that you were able to convey that the fondness that grew between Draco and Hermione was a gradual thing! I think this story would also benefit from being longer-- I think looking deeper into the aspects of their relationship between when Voldemort wins up until he's finally destroyed would make for a good story.

But either way, this was a pleasant read and I'm glad you suggested it to me!