The story is interesting in some ways, and that's great, it's got its own tone and voice, but its a bit lacking in others. The story seems to be a bit... scattered would be the best word for this. It doesn't seem to flow, and the russian in chapter three is off. The main character is nice but there isn't much of a connection to the reader, so she seems static. I do like how it starts with action. Great story with a few minor problems. I like.
August 13th, 2015 at 06:50pm