Feral - Comments

Firstly, I really like your choice of banner, it's perfect for this. (I didn't even know you can but put moving images on to banners >.<) Secondly, for three short paragraphs that was very intense and I mean that in a good way, haha. The writing to this is simply perfect and I really love the last line; For the first time you are entirely human: small, pathetic, weak. You know, because that's what we are, right?

Whoa. That twist, I wasn't quite expecting it to take that direction. The writing on this is absolutely brilliant, and I absolutely love the extended metaphor.
Great work.

Oh wow... not even sure what to say. I was definitely not expecting that end. Your writing is just beautiful though! I absolutely adore the descriptions and just everything about this piece! I'm glad I read this!

This is so beautiful written. Goodness, I just fell in love with every bit of this. All your words flow so beautifully amongst each other and I just can't seem to find a good enough comment to write <333

Wow, this was quite intense. I really liked the comparison of beauty to that of a tiger instead of a flower. That gives makes it more of a dangerous beauty in my mind than a sweet and innocent beauty. I also like the tiger gif. It's very captivating and I find myself just staring at it and how it seems to be snarling. I think that matches with the curl of your lip line.

I liked the way you wrote the second paragraph and how it's a bit of twist halfway through when you realise what you're actually describing. I thought that was clever.

The metaphor of them being an animal all the way through the story was lovely and I love the comparison between the animalistic side and the human side.

It was very well-written and I hope your teacher could see a great piece of work here through their initial shock.

Well that was amazing.
And extremely passionate.. And amazing.

I think it was really well done for a drabble and I kind of really wish it wasn't a drabble so I could read about a backstory to this chaos. But I like it a lot.