Even Hell Can Get Comfy Once You Settle In - Comments

@ isak valtersen
I actually planned on rewriting this piece at one point in the future, but I'll probably use original characters since I'm not really a "band-fic" person anymore. I've came a long way since writing this piece and I'm hoping that I'll be able to convey those emotions if I ever do decide to rewrite the piece.

I’m here as the new judge for the ‘Song Fic Contest’.

This was definitely an unapologetic piece about something taboo. A lot of people tiptoe around sensitive subjects like self-harm and suicide, or even romanticize it which you didn’t. I appreciated that because you tackled something straight-up and didn’t try to make it something that it wasn’t.

Nothing about it resonated with me, though. Where I sympathized for Oliver (and even Josh at one point), I didn’t connect at all. There wasn’t any emotional connection for me at all. And it’s not because I’ve never felt this kind of pain or something. I’ve read a lot of things where emotions and struggles I’ve never personally felt or gone through still made me feel it. I think what happened was that you lacked a very necessary emotional depth for this. You told me rather than showed me, and this entire situation required a lot of emotion. With lines like It made me feel low and I just didn't like that feeling at all. I felt like a bad person when I did that. I’m not going to connect with any of your characters. You never fleshed out any of Oliver’s emotions so it made the entire piece feel very hollow for me. You had a lot of opportunities to write about an entire spectrum of emotions, especially in that moment that they kissed and the moments leading up to the end. It felt like you were just summing everything up. I never connected so Oliver walking in on Josh and Dan was annoying because cheating is awful, but it didn’t make me angry like it should have. Oliver jumping at the end was sad, but it didn’t break my heart like it should have. I didn’t feel what I should have so I ended up being extremely detached from everything.

I’m aware that this story is a few years old now, but I definitely think that if you ever revisit this, you should go into the emotions in more depth so you deliver the impact that this story should have had.

@ poison and blood.
Glad you did. I worked quite a while on it.

What a beautiful piece! I loved it! xx

Well thank you. :3

This is really sad but beautiful at the same time (in how it was written, i'm not romanticizing suicide). This literally made me cry (but kind of in a good way? be proud that you can convey emotion so well with your writing).

@ born2bhaydene
I've never gotten a response like that before.

I love and hate you right now.

I have no words. This has (literally) left me breathless. I'm not even going to ask how. You are an amazing writer. I'm so glad that I'm co-writing with you.
The only thing I didn't particularly like was the layout. It hurt my eyes when I switched back to the black text on white to write this comment. But still, just amazing.

@ Ich Irimia
Well thank you. :3

Oh,don't be sorry:3 btw I really like the way you write.

Oh,don't be sorry:3 btw I really like the way you write.

@ Ich Irimia
I'm sorry I made you cry. I'll admit, I literally had to take a twenty minute break while typing it, it hit me so hard. I had to take time to calm down just so I could finish it with the ending that I did.

I am crying so fucking hard right now. ;-;