A Tag Story - Comments

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The plot to this is actually quite interesting. I like that he's a tagger. You don't see that often and his explanation of why he uses GB as a signature is really cool. That's rather clever and I like using the nursery rhyme like that. That's quite a unique idea.

The majority of this was very cut and dry I walked…, I looked…, I nodded…. It was so straightforward, but your last couple lines about the colour of his eyes and his smile were wonderfully descriptive. Like the bit about his blue eyes being the color of an angry ocean was fantastic. I would've loved to have seen more of that sprinkled throughout the chapter. When you write like that it's very captivating and if you mixed more of that kind of description with the blunt narration, it would really enhance the story.

I would suggest spacing your paragraphs. After every line of dialogue from a different character, double space so it's easier to read and readers can recognise who is speaking right away without needing a dialogue tag after every line.

I think you have an interesting backstory for this guy so far. He seems like a great character. If you want to write this, you should definitely continue it.