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Cute! I love this story!!! Update soon please please please!!

Great so far! btw Ryan Gosling wasnt in A Walk to Remember lol

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Yes an update! Ha ha, not that's been a super long time since the last one. I really don't like Matt I don't know why I just feel like he's secretly this horribly person. I love Charlotte though, I enjoy that she has flaws and strengths and isn't a mary-sue. Anxiously awaiting the next update.

Aw, I liked Dean better in this chapter. Despite his creepy perverted comments. I know Matt is supposed to be all fab and un-Dean like but I don't know, something about him sketches me out. Maybe it was Dean's reaction to him. Maybe it was just that he was instantly all like ~we should hang out somewhere else~ like instantly. Like whoa you don't have to jump that quickly. Anyway, I kind of felt bad for Dean at the end of this chapter because he seemed all pissy / slightly upset. And I'm just imagining Dean as this mega hottie and Matt as this okay kid with fat cheeks. Plus just his reaction and how he got all dramatic and left, UGH DEAN YOU CAN'T MAKE ME LIKE YOU LIKE THREE DAYS AGO YOU WERE PISSING IN MY CHEERIOS AND I DIDNT LIKE YOU QUIT.

But I really enjoyed this. I can't wait to see what happens next! Update soon. ❤

Stumbled upon this and now I can't wait for more. Update soon! :)

I think I'm the only one here not pissed of by Dean but then again I'm a sucker for a snarky bad boy. Love the story, can't wait to read more.

DEAN IS A DICK OKAY I DON'T LIKE HIM. yet. Make him get hit by something, knock some sense into him. JARED IS AW. I like this. It's too late for me to do a detailed comment bc so tired but your writing is fabulous and Brand New is too. <3

Man, Dean really pisses in my cheerios. His little posse does too. I kind of want to slap him upside his damn stupid head. I like Charlotte though, and Jared too. I secretly hope something serious happens with her and Jared. I know it probably won't be they're precious. And I just like him a whole hell of a lot better than Dean. Anyway, I'm really enjoying this! I can't wait to see how it unfolds.

So I was searching through the story pages and I saw this and obviously clicked into it and i'm really interested. I've been really into stories with characters like this and honestly I've just been looking for more stories like this so i'm happy I found it. One thing stuck out to me the most while reading though; you seem to be moving out of tenses a lot. Or at least frequently. In the second chapter you would/had used I've in places where I think that i'd would have worked better. Though I might be wrong, I just feel like it might have sounded better to me that way, it's just my opinion.

I do want to know what happened/will happen between Dean and the main character and why she dislikes him so much, it's really interesting. c: