Waste - Comments

This is awesome, it's only short but the detail you give is great and the emotion within it keeps the reader gripped!

Dear author,
I liked how the summary was just a sentence which stated a fact, someone had killed a man.

On to the chapter,
this is perfection. It's so intense and deep, so realistic..I have no words to desribe it, honestly.

I give this 9.7 out of 10 writing pens for this great piece of literature (if it wasn't for the slight edit this needs, I would have given this a full ten).

~Marian.

I really love your banner picture but the link color is almost impossible to see. Despite this minor detail, the entire piece drew me in. I mean, how could you NOT continue after reading the summary?

The narrator is such a mad, angry person and if he was a real human I'd definitely be scared of his impulses caused by anger.

This was such a morbid, disturbing drabble and I can't deny that I loved it! I think this was such a beautiful piece despite it's content with zero grammar/spelling mistakes; which is so darn refreshing. Great job !

Dear God, this was perfect. I love the roughness of the narrator speaking to the reader (or the person he's speaking to). It's so wonderful because you created such a brash character with just text. He is just speaking to the reader but we can tell that is sassy and doesn't give a fuck.

I love this character even though it is just a drabble. I would tell you to continue this and make it into a story but I think it works SO well as a drabble because it has a mystery to it. Drabbles should always have that aspect and you pulled it off so well.

I just fell in love with you for realsies.
okay seriously though this is SO GOOD

I just fell in love with you for realsies.
okay seriously though this is SO GOOD

I love drabbles that just feel like words spilled on a page for no reason other than to get them out of your head.

This character is really freaking badass. Yeah, he seems kind of crazy with the whole killing a guy thing and depressed with the whole not caring about anything thing but just the fact that he went out and did something and doesn't care at all seems really awesome to me. He's so cynical too, which adds to the whole mood you have going on here.

I liked that it was just a big chunk of text, too. It added to the whole “wordspill” feel you had here. It helped make it feel like the character was just like “here’s what I did, all in one place. Take it or leave it”.

I loved it.

i want to read more about this guy!:( perfect.

I love it when you write new things because then I have something new to comment on for Comment Monsters

God, I love this kid. He's so badass, with his 'I don't give two shits' attitude but he's so sassy as well, especially in the end when he's like 'bitch don't steal my move', it just made me giggle even though that's probably the opposite effect that you wanted I'm not too sure what this is either, but I loved it from the first word and honestly I just like anything you read because you're a top writer. I love how cynical he is as well. And dark and kind of really awesome.

The gif, oh gosh I think I could watch it all day. I don't know why but it's fascinating to me, and just too cool. Anyhow, onto comment about this.

I usually don't like huge paragraphs, well not huge but long paragraphs in general. I find I don't like them and this one was totally just, I don't know it was a good thing that it was all together because I feel it wouldn't have had the same affect on me. This dude captivated me from the first sentence with his I-don't-really-give-two-fucks attitude toward his actions, or the reader for that matter. I love so much how this touched on the topic of overpopulation and killers, I feel like some do have the thoughts in their head that they're doing the world good because there's too many people. This was fantastic. (Is that weird of me to say?)

BEAUTIFULLY DONE
you have no idea what i just experienced
the rush o h g o s h
the narrator was dark and very mysterious
this was amazing.

Wow, nicely said and done.

This was absolutely lovely. I love how the narrator seems to be speaking right to the reader or it's like a stream of conscious almost. And where it's all bunched together in one paragraph the way I read it was wonderful. Kind of nervous, all rushed together, nearly psychotic. It's like he's trying to justify what he's done to not only the reader, but maybe even himself? This piece was extremely interesting. I enjoyed it a lot. I liked the raunchy description he gave almost apathetically about blowing a guy's brains out and his only concern was that it was gross and it got all over him. While this all just seems psychotic on the surface if the reader takes the time to dig deep into it, especially the end part about the earth being over populated, a lot can be dug out of it. Like why do we complain about the earth being overpopulated, but we value human life so much that when people are murdered it's this big ordeal and in turn we kill them too? Why go through so much effort? This was a brilliant piece. It truly made me think and I appreciated it very much. Excellent job!

I feel like this may be how a lot of killers feel
but that ending is actually so true
trials
time
energy
this is dark and lovely