OOOooooooo great way to end the chapter! I ADORE the names Grace and Leo, I think they were made for each other ;D I can see her dialogue stained with jealousy, and I love that. Truly shows her how she acts in her element, and now just what she's thinking. Never, ever stop writing because you are truly magnificent at it! Your dialogue is quirky, sarcastic, and pretty addictive :) lol. I like how Leo differentiates himself from the crowd, shoes extremely nice characterization. You write with such voice and passion; those are truly admirable qualities for a writer to have. A job well done! Never, ever, ever, stop writing. No matter what anyone tells you!
Wishing you the best,
Olivia