Insomniactic Tendencies - Comments

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I really enjoyed the quality and depth of this. the descriptive writing is so very good. I like the story that's
unravelling.

I do hope you haven't given this up, although it feels like you have, but I wish you hadn't.

I would have loved to see what is next, what the reply to the return of the lighter would be.

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I love the banner and the background. It was the first thing I noticed.

Second of all, the length. I like how the chapters aren't too long or too short.

Also, the writing style is great. I only read the first chapter of it, but I'm going to go back and read the second one now.

Like the banner, first of all. It draws the moment, and the reader's attention, for just the right amount of time before allowing them to get into the story.

Second of all, I love the first "episode" of this. It has the right balance of emotional flair and humble writing style that it's believable. Kudos on that one.

A little hard in the writing for me in a couple spots, mostly just how things translated in my head at first, but otherwise a rather nice story!

- Tuari
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So firstly your layout is gorgeous. I love the gif, is that Effy from Skins?
Your plot is really good, and it flows well. You've made Violets feeling come across very well. I applaud you for that. I this this is excellent so far, keep it up!

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The first two chapters are extremely intriguing, and very emotional. It's clear that Violet is feeling immense regret for whatever happened 3 months prior to the story. I like the plot a lot! Keep going, you're doing great!

Again, comment swap sent me here! I guess they're like, "read, Olivia, read! Never ever stop!"

Well what can I say that I already haven't? :)

I do think it's quite unique you started it off as if it were addressing in a letter, I think it adds such character to an exposition and I'm glad you started it off like that.

Again, comment swap sent me here! I guess they're like, "read, Olivia, read! Never ever stop!"

Well what can I say that I already haven't? :)

I do think it's quite unique you started it off as if it were addressing in a letter, I think it adds such character to an exposition and I'm glad you started it off like that.

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First thing I noticed was your layout, which is super cool. Then I started reading, and I couldn't stop. Something about the way you write is so raw and realistic, which makes your story very intriguing. I'm already interested in seeing where Sebastian and Violet will go. Good start so far!!

your writing has a great atmosphere to it, the way violet describe's Sebastian's car made me feel like I was curled up inside it, seeing the gray glow of a downcast day illuminate the concert tickets taped to his windshield, the way sebastian replies to Violet on the back of a cigarette box in messy writing, it tells you a lot about his character without having to say too much and... I especially liked the pool/water metaphor 'The point is that even though my toes were in the water, that didn't mean I wanted to fully submerge.' sebastian and violet's relationship is such a unique one, it isn't dramatic and it isn't too sugary, it is given a realistic, moody vibe. Nicely written.

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I loved the start of the story. You instantly pulled me in with "I remember the smell of your car." Instantly, I was wondering about his car and Seb and the narrator's relationship. Then Violet talks about their relationship and I love when somebody can write first person point of view well.

I love how it started off like a letter. Your details and descriptions are fantastic. Your grammar is okay, but it could use a little proofreading. Lastly, in the second chapter, you should break up the paragraphs so it is easier to read. Otherwise than that, this is great!

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Oh wow, where do I start? I love your layout so incredibly much, it seems through this girls's eyes she's saying, "yeah I'm broken, does it look like I care?" I love the names Violet and Sebastian together, and the title of your first chapter was brilliant. I adore in literature when non-essential or unimportant objects take the weight of being a title, or even just an aspect of a story. Your grammar was spot-on and you write with a certain uncensored, painstakingly true voice that I really do love. Never, ever stop writing!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia

Comment swap sent me here again, sorry!

Oh wow, where do I start? I love your layout so incredibly much, it seems through this girls's eyes she's saying, "yeah I'm broken, does it look like I care?" I love the names Violet and Sebastian together, and the title of your first chapter was brilliant. I adore in literature when non-essential or unimportant objects take the weight of being a title, or even just an aspect of a story. Your grammar was spot-on and you write with a certain uncensored, painstakingly true voice that I really do love. Never, ever stop writing!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia

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This story is so personal, and I love it. The emotions are shown so vividly, and you really have a sense of what she's going through. I love the letters between Sebastian and Violet. I love how Violet almost rambled in her letter; it made it feel so much more realistic. I didn't catch any grammatical or spelling mistakes either.
Great job!

why did it post this many times?! My apologies!!

why did it post this many times?! My apologies!!

why did it post this many times?! My apologies!!

why did it post this many times?! My apologies!!

Oh wow, where do I start? I love your layout so incredibly much, it seems through this girls's eyes she's saying, "yeah I'm broken, does it look like I care?" I love the names Violet and Sebastian together, and the title of your first chapter was brilliant. I adore in literature when non-essential or unimportant objects take the weight of being a title, or even just an aspect of a story. Your grammar was spot-on and you write with a certain uncensored, painstakingly true voice that I really do love. Never, ever stop writing!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia

Oh wow, where do I start? I love your layout so incredibly much, it seems through this girls's eyes she's saying, "yeah I'm broken, does it look like I care?" I love the names Violet and Sebastian together, and the title of your first chapter was brilliant. I adore in literature when non-essential or unimportant objects take the weight of being a title, or even just an aspect of a story. Your grammar was spot-on and you write with a certain uncensored, painstakingly true voice that I really do love. Never, ever stop writing!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia

Oh wow, where do I start? I love your layout so incredibly much, it seems through this girls's eyes she's saying, "yeah I'm broken, does it look like I care?" I love the names Violet and Sebastian together, and the title of your first chapter was brilliant. I adore in literature when non-essential or unimportant objects take the weight of being a title, or even just an aspect of a story. Your grammar was spot-on and you write with a certain uncensored, painstakingly true voice that I really do love. Never, ever stop writing!!

Wishing you the best,

Olivia