To Break Free - Comments

I really liked the last few chapters. But I'm really not sure how Aiden's plan is going to work if Riley is avoiding him.

So, I seriously love this story. But, just pointing out. You haven't updated in 5 days. And that's endangering to you. Just thought you should know.

Something I noticed as I clicked on this story was how the colors went together. How you actually took from the picture to get the background color (at least I believe you did) that's good, and I appreciate that. It's a little brighter than the color of her sweater but it works.

Something I in chapter 2:
Riley looks up, startled. : Riley looked up, startled.

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I believe this happened in chapter three, but the kiss on the cheek from Aiden seemed a bit odd for someone just meeting a girl and wouldn't see feel awkward? I mean I would, it was just weird to me but maybe that's because i'm not very much into high school stories.

This isn't a bad story, it seems like it is moving a little fast but it is your story and I think that it could be very good! Keep at it c:

I don't know, both seem like really nice people.... but Shayla is trying to protect Riley where Aiden is trying to break her. So Shayla. I just feel really bad for Riley because she is not going to see this coming and it is going to hit her the hardest. I just hope it doesn't break her.
Please update soon! :)

@ Madame Torsadee
Thank you! :D And thanks for adding it to your signature, I like it!

It's so great I almost hate myself for reading right now. Cause it isn't done! Good job! its amaaaazing.

I really like it so far. Riley is such a cute character (I don't know why, but she just it) and I love the fact that she stutters. Aiden seems kind-of to nice, but I like his character.
Looking forward to seeing where this goes.

Aw man no, I don't want Aiden to be bad news. Or maybe I do. I like bad boys in stories. Really though how shitty is that the first person you meet and that's nice to you is apparently known as bad news around school. EITHER THAT OR SHAYLA IS A LYING HUSSY BECAUSE SHE DATED HIM AND THINGS ENDED BADLY SO NOW SHE'S TRYING TO RUIN HIS LIFE. Yeah... That's a little dramatic, but who knows. It could happen. I mean, if you wanted it to since it's your story. I love how she's trying to get a fresh start, though. I myself can't wait to go to college and make my own fresh start. Riley is almost precious she's so shy and uncomfortable speaking to people. I mean, it's just sweet how people make her nervous. And it's even more admirable how hard she's trying to make friends here! I'm proud of her. I like how you make it realistic with how she struggles with people instead of moving here and immediately she's a social butterfly. Great job!

The plot seems really nice and I love the way you connect to the girl's feelings. I just felt the the story would gather more inerest if it moves in a slower pace.

I waiting for the next chapter...