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I love, love, love this layout. It's very well put-together and readable. I'm not really into this fandom (bandom?) so I'll be regarding this as an original fiction, and a very well-written one at that! The relationship between the two characters and the clear unreliability of the narrator was all very well-done, and I appreciate that you didn't glamorize their homelessness.

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I hope you won the contest because I enjoyed this. Agreed with below the gif is awesome. I can never find good ones. The story was well told and I wish there was more because I was intrigued.

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The layout is amazing. I'm a sucker for simple layouts. Too man are made t hard on the eyes. your description is pretty amazing and the sad tone comes through amazing. I'm with Laredo. on the quote thing. It's awesome.

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So, first off, I really liked the layout and the quote in the gif. You pull the reader in with the quote in the summary. But you truly pull the reader in with your knack for details, while keeping a story going at the same time.

I really enjoyed the relationship between Spencer and Ryan and how you described it. You didn't make their homelessness seem special, it was just them. There wasn't a lot of dialogue, which I liked because you evenly spaced it out.

This was well-written but it had a sad tone. But I liked the little bit of hope at the end. :)

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So first of all I liked your layout. It's simple but it really fits with the story. I loved the way you describe. You really manage to capture everything. All in all this was great! Awesome job!

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Dude your layout is perfect.
The guy looks like he's scared of something and just decided to run, to lose himself.
I like how you write, the imagery is beautiful, and I agree COMPLETELY with the comment below me. I love that you don't glamorize their homelessness. Idk I just have a pet peeve of writer's doing that.
I like it when the story's realistic and raw.

I adore this story.
It's a different take on bandfics, and I love it. Your writings style really draws the reader in, and has just the right amount of detail. There wasn't one point where I sat there thinking "oh god when will this end?", unlike several stories I've come across in comment swap.
I also love how you don't glamorize the fact that Spencer and Ryan are homeless. A lot of writers tend to make the situation seem more charming than it is.
So good job. And I like the layout :3

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I will start out with how i like your layout. Its a little plain but it goes really well with your story. Your story is simple but that is not a bad thing. People like simple. Well I like simple. Your vocabulary was a little plain though but that is okay cause not every one is a fan of big words. I like the title. It gives no hints as to what you're walking into. The beginning did not really drawl me in at first but I ended up liking it. If you write more one this I would enjoy reading it.

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Your layout is nice. It's pretty but fits in well with the story. You've used a lot of detail, but in places I think more would work well. You've kept your use of language very simple, and I'm not really a fan of that. I like the plot though, good work here!

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I loved this. The layout was very simple and went with the simplicity of your story. It was simply written but very detailed I'm not really sure how you pulled that off. I like how I don't really know much about the characters but I feel like I've just taken a backseat to their lives and want to know much much more. I'd like to know what's up with Ryan and what he does under the streetlamp and why he does it? I'd also like to know what he's sick with and what the relationship is between him and Spencer. I just have a lot of questions about the story and would really enjoy reading more. It seems like you wrote this as a one shot and probably won't be adding more chapters, but if you do I would love to know. I was listening to noctuary by bonobo while reading this and it fit perfectly.

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