The Other Side - Comments

I love Harry Potter Fan-fics (guilty of writing my own). I really love the authenticity of your language. My Fan-fics are more like if there was an alternate reality where everyone was actually from America. Anyway this is great! Keep up the good work!

OMG no you are amazing!!!! Thank you! Ima write some more tonight!

This is amazingggggggggggg O.O sorry I had to. But I just asdfghjkl yay. Your descriptions are awesome :DDD you don't over do it and end up killing it like most people do. Tis amazing.

(Sorry for the random weirdness)

No, oxford comma, YOU ARE.

THIS IS AMAZING

Comment Swap:)
there's a couple of grammar mistakes in there but nothing serious, a quick proof read would sort those out. You mentioned that it was slow moving but I don't think that's a bad thing, many fanfic rush in too fast and their in love after 2 minuets. your descriptions are really good, they're just the right length too; I often find that description can either be too long and tedious or really short and lacking in any detail but I think you nailed it. overall I really liked this and i'm curious as to where you going to take it. x

I hope you update soon too! I love this story. And, no, I don't think you're going to slow with the harry thing because most people rush into it and BOOM! Harry and the oc are boyfriend and girlfriend on their first day of classes. Hate that. You know how to work suspension. There's so many open doors with this storyline, what with the boggart situation that will occur, love interest etc. LOVIN IT

I hope you update soon :)

I will admit that the grammatical errors are due to the fact that I am not proof-reading before I upload chapters. Which I probably should be doing. When I have writers block, I will go back and fix all my mistakes. Thank you for taking the time to read! <3

From comment swap.
I really love the amount of description that you have. It really brings the story to life, and you have just the right amount. While reading, I did catch a few grammatical mistakes, not to many, nothing a quick read through won't catch. Magdalen seems to have a really strong personality, and I think that you write her very well.
Keep up the good work!

Thank you for the comment, and an extra thank you for the critical feedback. It's really refreshing to hear an honest opinion because it really helps me see my story from a new reader's point of view. I will aim to avoid the unnecessary scenes. Thank you immensely!

I like that you use description, it is an important aspect of the story that some of the people on this site tend to ignore. This story is well written, and well planned. The main characters’ personality is strong enough so I believe her voice will be as equally strong and she won’t disappear among other characters. There was one thing that I did not like about this story, the description of her morning routine in the second chapter, it just felt like a waste of words and sounded awkward.
Overall, I think this story will turn out great and attract a lot of readers.

Thank you so much! It's individual comments like yours that drive me to write more! Expect an update within the next 24 hours. x

I just found this story and I really like it! I love how you write! I'm excited for more :)