Bitten - Comments

I've always been a sucker for history, so the fact that this is set way in the past already has me freaking out and happy dancing! You've added in so many tiny details that I can imagine everything perfectly when I'm reading through. Not only have you captured the time within those details, but you've captured it within the very word choice itself and I love that. I didn't even see the vampire twist coming until he bit her! You've done an exceptionally good job of this (and holy crap, the ending of this was hot). I don't like Avenged Sevenfold myself, but this pretty much read as an original fiction, so I had absolutely no problems reading this happily! You've got a few minor grammar errors here and there in regards to dialogue, but aside from that, no complaints!

I'll be announcing the winners shortly, so good luck!

Firstly, I love that it's set in an olden time, that is something you don't often see in one shots and stories and I love ones that are set in some different period of time. It's awesome! Anyways on with the actual story reading.
Holy fucking wow. WHY MUST ALL OF YOUR WRITINGS BE SO DAMN HOT? It puts my smut to shame it really does. I had to google translate what he said but damn, that's sweet. You should feel proud, I loved it!

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahmazing!

This was beautifully written. I loved the fact that it was set so far into the paSt. The imagery was spot on the entire time and the detailing was just right. The way that every time they were together she hasn't seen him to the point where I was desperate for her to see him for the first time. The sex scene was joy and heavy and made me squirm a bit reading it. Great job love!!

That was utterly brilliant! Well written, extremely creative - you really brought the characters to life and it was as if I could taste and smell exactly what Marissa did. It felt really gothic and I Just loved it. It was sexy and romantic, just like any good vampire story should be. God, I wish I could write like you. Please write more like this

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Spank you very much! XD

I now cease to exist because holy freaking hell was this a hot one shot! Brian as a sexy vampire is just, so sinfully pleasurable it hurts. Your writing's quickly become my aphrodisiac and holy shit. Please, get me a bathtub full of ice water!