Scream for Me Baby, Just Like She Did. - Comments

@ AngelaSwingSet
Yeah I understand. I have kids and I had just started a job right after I started this story:p

@ Jenia
Been there! I have four kids and if I want to write something, I have to pump it and check it later one whenever I get time!

@ AngelaSwingSet
I'm glad you like the story!! :) ad thank you for the advice, I kinda finished it in a hurry though

So far, I have only read the first chapter and I love it. I'm a sucker for stories like this. I like how much detail you put into what you say. Sometimes, it's unneeded, but I personally like knowing a lot about what's going on. The only thing I have to say, is watch some punctuation. There's a few place where a comma would have been nice. Or maybe breaking up sentences, but all around it's freakin' fantastic!

Okay, adding on to my comment from before. I have read several chapters now and I am in absolute love with it. I'm going to have to finish it tomorrow when I have some more time, but I'm so excited that I found this.

So far, I have only read the first chapter and I love it. I'm a sucker for stories like this. I like how much detail you put into what you say. Sometimes, it's unneeded, but I personally like knowing a lot about what's going on. The only thing I have to say, is watch some punctuation. There's a few place where a comma would have been nice. Or maybe breaking up sentences, but all around it's freakin' fantastic!

@ MissyPrissy
Loki made everything appear to others that she had been in a coma and everything. Loki's powers were just that strong and all. :)

What happened between them was real. Other than her actually killing Loki.

@ MissyPrissy
Loki made everything appear to others that she had been in a coma and everything. Loki's powers were just that strong and all. :)

What happened between them was real. Other than her actually killing Loki.

Wait... was it all a dream, or did she really kill him... What actually happened???

@CuppaJoel
Thank you Joel. :) this is where I was wanting to go, like I said more dark than its been going. lol

Glad to see you're back, and with a dynamic update as well. This doesn't bode well for Kayden, whether it's Loki or Teegan who thwarted her attempt. Keep up the good work!

@ AnimeTurtle
I've been meaning to get more up, but I've got a new job and the hours haven't get set yet, so I don't know when I get home and all, and then the family also, so.. Whenever I get time, I'll post more up. :) I'm glad you like it though, makes me feel awesome! :D

The book has me on edge and I'm wishing there was more if it

I really like the main idea behind your story and I like where it's going in general. I only have one question for you.. Have you considered getting a beta or just someone to read your chapters before you post them? Grammar and structure is generally no the best :P Good ideas here though

xxMorgan

@ PixiStix
You might be in luck tonight ;D lol (Who knows.. maybe double?!) Lol But i'm glad you like it, thank you for reading it.

I really like this story, and I can't wait for the next update :) It is defiantly interesting!

@ Jenia
Haha no problem! I feel like that to when people read my stories! And she seems very strong willed! I feel that you did a great job with charictorization!

@ CassieKazee
Well thank you so much for the thoughts! and I would gladly check it out. :) Kayden is a strong willed girl, which will come into play later, everyone has their breaking point, yea? I do greatly appreciate you reading and subscribing also, makes me feel all fuzzy on the inside! :D

Hey! I just stared reading your story! I think it is very good! The descriptions are very nice and i really like your main character! She seems strong! I like her a lot haha! (I havent finished all the chapters yet! I promise i will!) I think you just gained a new subscriber! I write an original vampire story myself! It would be awesome if you checked it out! I only have 3 chapters written so far but i feel i am making progress! Well i am going to read more of your story! Seeya!