July 15th, 2013 at 03:27am
I really like where you're going with this! But, one suggestion: for your conversations, put a quote, then double space before the next one. For example:
"Blah blah blah," She said about her annoying brother. He had been on her nerves for quite some time.
"Blah blah ditty-blah!" He retorted.
It just makes conversations flow better and it's easier to read. :]
Other than that I can't see anything else wrong. Keep up the good work!
Thanks!