July 15th, 2013 at 02:19pm
Oh my GOSH! So I'm pretty excited for this, it sounds awesome.
...exactly what i wanted to be... : ...exactly what I wanted to be...
That's all I saw that needed a little tweaking!
Okay so what the hell, I hope you have this whole story prewritten because I'm going to need updates on it like, ASAP, ALL THE TIME. This man sounds so crazy but so intriguing and I love how you made him, instead of caring that his mother was getting beaten, just seen so interested in it. Maybe someday i'll be like my father, it's just so chilling and you've made his indifference so prominent, I think that this is great.
Unfortunately, I don't have everything prewritten, but i WILL be updating once or twice a day for a while!
And thanks for the tweaking advice :)