Thank you very much, I'll probably go and fix the errors now if you don't mind :D
July 16th, 2013 at 10:32am
Summary: Even thought the summary was one line, you really summed up the story 4/5
Layout: Very creative! 4/5
Story:
Chapter One- In this chapter I only saw one mistake. You spelled practicing incorrectly. Other than that, it was lovely. If I'm correct in assuming, you're using second person. Even if you aren't, I like the way the first chapter is written
Chapter Two- Ah, the description you use is so lovely! Also, you spelled boney incorrectly. Other than the few mistakes in chapters one and two, you're mistake free!
Chapter Three- Ah, beautiful way to end this story. I didn't see a single error in this chapter.
Story wise, I give you a 3/5. You had a few grammar mistakes and while you kept this short and consistent I got a little confused at times. I had to go back and read again.
However, you do get bonus points for using slash and having an original layout.
Final Score: 13/15
Good luck!