One. Two. Die. - Comments

Hi! Like promised I'm starting to read your stories and reviewing them! I picked this one first because stories about ghosts always catch my attention .

The story started with dialogue and little description, on the second chapter you balanced them better. You don't need to throw a lot of information at once in the beginning, especially if it's not your style, but a few lines of description among dialogue will help your reader to get into the story and solve the problems @Fair pointed out in her comment.

Well, I loved the idea for your plot, sounds really interesting and I like the way you write, straight to the point, it suits very well this sort of story. I'm subscribing, so I hope you'll update it soon, I really want to know what is going to happen!

Wow, I'm loving this!

The premise of this story is intriguing, so it'll be very interesting to see where it goes.

Also, your layout is gorgeous, and the summary is very spooky.

This layout's pretty nice, I would use a different color for the background to match the banner but I assume you did it on purpose so you know, to each their own. I do like the picture though.

The summary was actually pretty interesting to me and the title I was like wait, what?

Reading the first chapter I feel like there was a lack of emotion from Jenna and her mother for her to get grounded. I think it would be better to see more sarcasm between them but otherwise, I'm pretty interested and curious to see where this goes.

Sounds interesting update soon.