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    July 21st, 2013 at 01:46pm
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    its a good idea and concept, i just think you need to work on your punctuation, grammar and spelling. also it kept goung from 1st person to 3rd person which was both confusing and distracting.
    July 21st, 2013 at 01:45pm
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