I find it interesting that you wrote in second-person. That's a very difficult perspective to write fluidly without making the narrator seem too powerful over the character, an I think you've done it well. Your word choice is intelligent and your grammar is good, and that's what I think defines whether a story is successful.
I got a very clear idea of what was happening, could picture Spencer Reid's suffering and confusion as I read. That makes me (and others) love a story.
Wow. This was seriously amazing! I love the perspective you wrote with and the way you incorporated the prompt word. I really enjoyed reading this, so thank you for entering my contest :)
I got a very clear idea of what was happening, could picture Spencer Reid's suffering and confusion as I read. That makes me (and others) love a story.
Cheers~