Cleo - Comments

@ naruto uzumaki
Woo! Thanks. It is different, especially for me. I've never written anything like this.

This story is very interesting and different, I'm quite enjoying it. Keep up the good work.

@ triviality.
Thank you. I've never written a heartless character before. Though I know she won't be FOREVER heartless.

I really love this, it's interesting and I really want to know what happens next. I'm a sucker for the heartless MC's, even though Cleo confuses me a little. And I love her dynamics with the boys, and I can't wait to learn more about it!

So I decided to read this because you wrote it, even though it is a One Direction fanfiction. And I'm glad I did. Even though you are writing fanfiction, if somebody didn't know who One Direction was, they could read this as an original fiction and enjoy it just as much.

I like how well you describe the boys and Cleo, and how easy the story is to read. Nothing about it is boring, and I found myself enjoying reading it. Which is a big feat if I'm somebody who doesn't like One Direction. The descriptions are perfect and there isn't too much dialogue where it weighs it down. This is great. :)

Thanks for answering my question, I'm a lot less confused now! I think that this is going great so far, I'm excited to see where this goes too. :) I want her and Liam to be a thing! And I don't think that I like jasmine very much, I just don't want the boys to end up liking her more than Cleo! Uhgg, okay this is really long so I'll stop now! Update soon :)

Very good update! But I don't want Liam to be upset, you should make them work it out in one of the next chapters :)

I'm interested to see how Cleo protects Jasmine, but wait is her name Cleo or Maria? Anyways, I think Cleo/Maria will take a liking to Jasmine and try and become her 'guardian angel.' Update soon, please and thank you :)

@ Katherine-Lynn
I actually have the next chapter done. I can try to fit in some back story at some point though. I'll do my best :)

Cannot wait, though I would have enjoyed a little more back story to her rising up and becoming a leader, but it was good! Maybe make the next chapter a little more detailed if possible. Thanks for the speedy update.

I'm not 100% sure this is, but I think that I may like it more as it progresses. I'm interested to read your next update, so keep writing, please and thank you :)