On Her Own - Comments

I don't usually like fan fiction but I love The Walking Dead and this was almost, if not, just as good as watching an episode of it. The layout is great too. As I said before your descriptions are so strong and detailed and really allows the reader to visualize everything that is happening in the story. I like how, unlike the TV show, this follows mainly just one character, Ivy. The plot seems pretty good and interesting too so stay writing it, I'll definitely be checking back for more!

Well to be frank I don't see the whole big deal about the Walking Dead. I watched a little bit of an episode and just didn't like it too much, so I wasn't too thrilled to have to read this story(comment swap)
BUT in saying that, once I started to actually read and get into the story I forgot about all that. You have excellent descriptions in here, especially when it comes to the horror/gore side of things. I'm big into that kind of thing, so I really enjoyed those parts of your story. I think that overall this is a very good story, I surprised myself by liking it haha. You're a very good writer and I hope you keep going!

So, I've never seen The Walking Dead before (you can call me a hermit, if your heart so desires), but really, I didn't need to have seen it to understand your story. Your descriptions were really good, and I got a good sense of what was going on in this world.

First, I really enjoyed the first chapter. I felt that I really got to know Ivy pretty well. She definitely seems like an independent person, though, I wish she would find her brother! I kind of have this fear that she'll find him as a walker, and that would suck, aha. Anyway, I really feel that you captured her tiredness well, and I felt tired for her. She seems really calculating, strong, and smart. Already I like her.

Gee whiz, though, if I were her I wouldn't have followed that group! They seem like they would only get her in trouble due to carelessness or something.

In chapter two, I really thought the group was crazy haha! I'm guessing this is the cast of characters from the TV show? But anyway, so she followed them, and the Asian American guy at least noticed her and introduced who everyone was. I don't blame her from wanting to get away from the group - so like the family... is there this love triangle going on with the idiotic guy, his wife, and the authoritative one? I may have missed something, of course, and it's probably confusing to me since I've never seen the show. Anyway, I'm really interested to see who shot the walker and what happens after! Great writing, keep it up!!!

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Wow you're such a great writer and so descriptive, you even describe the action brilliantly. To be honest i'm not a massive gore lover but i don't hate it either, i guess i'm somewhere in the middle.. a little undecided about it. but i think this may have turned me into a gore lover.. you seriously need to keep this up it's utterly amazing

Damn, you're descriptive. That's good. I love the Gore, to be honest. You should seriously keep this going. You describe the scene, the noises, and the action so well. You don't see much of that anymore. You're not straight to the point, like most writers. Your writing style is totally unique as well. Subscribing. Definitely.