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  • xomusic_luvxo

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    I love the intense relationship b/w Harry and Charlie... very nice writing
    August 10th, 2013 at 04:05am
  • emma306

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    niall is such a cutie i'm glad they're friends....and etta...great name ;)
    August 9th, 2013 at 03:45am
  • xomusic_luvxo

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    More more more more
    August 9th, 2013 at 02:38am
  • Maddi;

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    I think this story is pretty good so far. I like the Harry you created, who is this hopeless romantic. It's just adorable and I don't read many stories where he acts that way all the time.
    One piece of advice I can give you is that the story comes off as being a little bit choppy because there are so many page breaks and bits of scenes. It makes it hard to follow because just when you're getting into one scene it skips into the next. I think you could benefit from expanding your scenes more and not jumping around as much. Other than that, great job!
    August 7th, 2013 at 05:37pm
  • xomusic_luvxo

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    Post more please. Immediately, the suspense is killing me
    August 7th, 2013 at 01:38am
  • xomusic_luvxo

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    I like the names of the chapters. Very original!
    August 6th, 2013 at 03:48pm
  • justSJ

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    awww no :(
    August 6th, 2013 at 10:43am
  • emma306

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    I'm addicted. Keep updating, I'm begging you!!
    August 6th, 2013 at 08:55am
  • Write.with.Love

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    So I havent even read this yet and I love it simply because of the background!! Best I've seen.
    August 6th, 2013 at 08:45am
  • SandraL

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    Really like this story! Great job ;)
    August 3rd, 2013 at 07:29pm
  • timeisup

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    This is hilarious
    August 3rd, 2013 at 06:57pm
  • sportsfanatic19

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    I really like this!
    August 1st, 2013 at 12:03am
  • skinny love.

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    Just some writing advice. Try not to write and then cut it off and write a different scene. It makes the story chopping and all over the place. Put detail into the settings and feelings. It will keep the readers wanting more.
    But I think I will be subscribing to this - I like it so far !
    July 31st, 2013 at 01:43am
  • xomusic_luvxo

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    omg I love your story! please update soon!
    July 31st, 2013 at 12:46am
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