The Kids From Yesterday - Comments

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Well I really like this story. I completely agree that you should have more comments and recommendations. The layout is absolutely perfect too. The spelling and grammar could use a little work, just make sure you read through it before you upload it once or twice to double check, other than that it's ok if its not perfect. it's still a great story. I love Elle's character btw. She is perfect. I'll definitely read on and wait for an update.

@ Whocaresabouttheuser
Thank you for the kind words! I'm glad you think highly of my story! Thanks for the comment, and rec!

I wasn't going to comment but I saw that you only have like eight comments and two recommendations, and seriously, you deserve more, your story is awesome.

Oh, and I forgot to mention. I love the layout.

Oh, and I forgot to mention. I love the layout.

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I think it was very well written. It was not whatsoever cliché. I hope there’s going to be romance in there. Because I’d like to read some romance, but all romance novels are boring and stereotypical (Hot girl, hot guy, a flaw that brings them together. BORRRRRING!!!!). But I really enjoyed this first chapter. And I’m not just saying that. I’m kind of hypercritical when it comes to reading stuff. I’ll be reading further soon and if I like the next chapters, too, I’ll definitely be recommending you and your fan fiction. Good job.
Errors and Mistakes:
She looked at the person, he was short for a guy, but still taller than… (After ‘person’ you need a period, not a comma.)
He just fucking me her, yeah he saved her life and… (me=met)
He thought for a second, contemplating why he did care… He wouldn’t be able to live with himself if he let her go and not know if she was going to be safe. (It’s true that the voice is third person, but you can’t just suddenly change viewpoint. It’s a major mistake. What I mean, is that you were in the girl’s head and here you suddenly got into the boy’s head. That’s very wrong.)

@Lovinmusic
Thanks for the comment sweetheart! I'm updating as we speak!

Wow I love your story!!! I'm so engrossed in it already - you've really captured Ellie's character and I love her ^_^ I think the relationship between her and Ray is just fantastic and I knew Gee would warm up to her eventually!!!
I SO loved the bit where you wrote "if her feet could sing they would sing in angelic verses of gratitude" and "call me short shit" I genuinely lol'd at them :D
Keep writing its such a great story and I can't wait to see what happens!! :D

love it can't wait for the next chapter.

@ Cynmar87
Thank you! I'm glad you're liking it!

Awesome story ! I've been needing a new Frank fanfic to read