September 10th, 2013 at 08:50pm
Just one note to begin with- it's a little difficult to see the writing with the background of the content, the transparent colour with the repeated background is a little hard to see the text.
I liked the sex, and I loved having Matt as the Dom, however, I did notice a few inconsistencies. And I'm not trying to be mean here at all, I'm merely citing what I saw in the story and offering some feedback on it. I know you've got both 'Daddy' and 'Sir' in their- I would say just stick with one rather than have both, it can get a little confusing sometimes.
But aside from that, I loved it. Thank you so much for entering my contest!
Thank you for your feedback and for the criticism. I always appreciate some help. :)