Destroy His Dream of Beauty - Comments

I really liked this story. How you handled that twist was really great. It flowed from one scene to another just great. And the ending was really good, too. I could really see that whole scene as I read it. :)

I actually found this really cute. I'm not sure if cute was what you were going for, but I just saw a little boy making a sandcastle and thinking he owned the world, and it was adorable.

I really enjoyed your writing style, your descriptions were simple and clean and fit in really well with the story you were writing. I loved how you made everything seem so magical and fantasy-like, only to end with his parents telling him it was time to leave. It created a really nice contrast.

I loved the last little paragraph as well, the last sentence really ended the story well, and kind of set a "nothing last forever" type of tone.

Really well done!

Ah, I have to tell you, I really enjoyed your writing style. You have this power of capturing the reader's attention right away with your knack for detail and description. I admire that.

I like how this character is anonymous and you simply refer to him with pronouns. It adds to the whole mystery of the story, like who is he and why is he so important? We know he is king, but I like that we can kind of form theories about him.

Well done on the length of this story. I feel like it being short is a good thing. It leaves the mystery behind and while I definitely think you can create a whole story out of this, I think it is best you leave it as a drabble. You packed so much emotion in it that I love that this is open-ended.

Incredible read.

For a moment the way you described everything seemed so magical. I thought for a second that this was a fantasy story, haha. But really you wrote things from a kid's point of view; of how his castle/creation looked in his eyes. I thought that was really clever. It wasn't until the last few paragraphs that I realized this; when his mother took his hand and told him they had to leave. I assume it was just a lovely day at the beach? :) This was really sweet (ღ˘◡˘ღ) 

This was really well done! I really enjoyed reading this! Your descriptions are wonderful, and the ending was perfect. The only thing I'd change if I were you would be the "it's" to "its" in this sentence: as not only its king but also its savior, it’s architect.

A little kids dream. Very interesting. But of course no one does it alone in real life. :) haha peasant dad!! Thank God for parents, they took him home before the water squishes it!