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  • elleirarenlle

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    your writing is AMAZING. i love the..simple but like, deep thought behind the dialogue between adena and garrett, and just your general skills of making it authentic and beautiful and flowing just aghh so good0.o
    October 11th, 2013 at 06:37pm
  • Rachel-Marie

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    I adore everything about this story. I think both characters are great and you writing is just so beautiful! Love it(:
    October 8th, 2013 at 03:29pm
  • elleirarenlle

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    wow LOVE IT. awesome sauce im excited cant wait for the updateX)
    September 25th, 2013 at 04:59am
  • raja sahara

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    lolgarrett. what a cutie. he's a poor messed up soul and you would think in a student/teacher story that the student would be the messed up one and the teacher would be the one to help her get through but nOPE NOT YOU BECAUSE YOU MAKE CLICHES NOT CLICHES AND I'M JEALOUS OF YOUR TALENT BECAUSE WHO ELSE CAN DO THAT? Adena is so kind and I can't wait for their relationship to blossom. your characters are just gr8 ok.
    September 15th, 2013 at 07:45pm
  • raja sahara

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    aw I love Adena. She seems so sweet and optimistic about life and, meanwhile, Garrett is so mysterious and brooding. It's hot Lick
    I can tell they'll have a tumultuous relationship and I'm really hoping she won't die from her disease!
    August 15th, 2013 at 08:15pm
  • oh bear

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    Guess who's getting around to commenting whoo it's me hi I am so excited and just ugh Garrett and Adena and ugh just <3
    sorry this didn't have more substance but I can't think of anything right now other than the fact that he sounds smitten already.
    August 11th, 2013 at 10:31am
  • losing control.

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    Yay student/teacher cliches!

    Really though, I adore the title of this story, and the layout is gorgeous. I love the picture you used for the banner.

    Now, onto the story. I really like your writing style, it's really simple and flows really well, and I feel like even if you wrote the most cliche thing in the world, you'd still make it seem like it was your idea because of how awesome your writing style is.

    Your characters are great, too. I really like Adena's name, and the main guy seems really interesting. I'm interested to see where you go with this!
    August 9th, 2013 at 09:03pm
  • raja sahara

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    Wow OMGYES
    ^how I'm feelin' about this
    This is already so good (but as if I thought otherwise) and I love the main guy already, and even Adena, even though we don't know her character well enough BUT WHO CARES BECAUSE YOU WROTE HER SO SHE SHALL BE GREAT REGARDLESS.
    August 9th, 2013 at 06:19am
  • raja sahara

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    oh my god I am so excited Crazy
    August 6th, 2013 at 09:40pm
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