She - Comments

@ Death The Angel

thank you so much

I'm smiling hardcore right now! I appreciate your comment so very much!

This.is.sheer.perfection. I can't even describe how much I love this piece, it's so descriptive and relatable, seeing something once that leaves an everlasting impression on someone's life, wether it be a person or a thing, this was great, I love it's short abruptness as well!

I love this. The descriptions and the comparisons that you write are amazing. "Her head rearing back like an unbridled stallion..." You use the perfect amount of detail. Not too much that it annoys the person, and not to little that they can only vision half of it. The use of "unbridled stallion" makes it sound more majestic than somebody throwing their head back. I applaud you.

This was so beautifully well written. I love every single bit of it

This was really lovely. I like how the title tied in with the story so well, and the background was really pretty. Gifs as banners are always cool as well.

I agree with fascination about loving how you told about how the girl is not only beautiful in how she looks, but also how she acts and presents herself. You don’t see that very often in stories and I loved that.

I also really liked how you had a sentence at the beginning of each paragraph that told what the paragraph was gonna be based on, and they were all separate and interconnected.

This was very well written, well done!

I really like how set this up and how you give a describing word to "she" and then explained it in more depth in the following paragraph. I loved that.

I also love how you described this girl and I can picture her perfectly in my head and she sure is gorgeously perfect.

The best part about this story in my opinion is that this girl is not only beautiful in looks but in the way she presents herself and acts. No other story goes in depth about what the character DOES to make them beautiful, only the way they look and I'm so glad you widened readers' horizons with that.

Overall, I absolutely adore this story and it's quite beautiful.

How do I describe this drabble? It's wonderful. It was so simple and I really enjoyed how you described the girl without giving too much detail. You gave just enough of the right details and it was great. I like how you had different paragraphs dedicated to different things that made her who she is.

What I also enjoy about it is that this seems to be a moment in time. There is so much going on in the narrator's head in this one moment and he describes the girl so well. I loved that whole idea of him describing her in an instant.

I kind of wish he could have saw her again, but that's what a drabble is for. There's kind of a mystery to it. Well done. :)