Hello, I'm from the Chains, whips, fetishes, OH MY! contest. Your sex scene was written very nicely. I thought it was really realistic and the fetish was shown well. That being said, I suggest next time you balance out dialogue and information. Especially if you are writing smut. Thing that's the only criticism I can give. You did a great job anyway. I like how you had the guy as the one being dominated by the way. Many stories usually has the female as the submissive so I'm glad to see something different.
Overall, I liked the story. The whole point was to write about fetishes and you did just that.
Overall, I liked the story. The whole point was to write about fetishes and you did just that.