The Phoenix - Comments

@ storm the ripper
Well it is only the first chapter :P what makes you think she's a mary-sue?

I like this story but i think the character named blade could use some more development, she kind of seems like a 'Mary sue'

@ RebelBullet
Thank you so much sweetie :) I think it's cause most of the writers here want to create an OFC like themselves so they can imagine what a relationship with one of the BVB guys might be like xD
Thanks for correcting my spelling, I always get androgynous wrong, and it's not in my spellchecker so I usually have to rely on memory xD I got the whole androgynous idea from watch videos of a band named cinema bizarre, they're androgynous guys that dress in visual kei, they were kind of my inspiration for Halo xD So you're welcome to use the idea <3

Hey, this isn't bad :)
I'm actually a little surprised since so many OMC stories are starting to sound like my own unposted ideas. I thought I was the only one who considered things like that.
I can always appreciate the various twists or differences, though. Yours is another interesting one that I haven't seen yet. Of course, it isn't that hard since OMC stories...aren't really popular. I wonder why that is? :|

Also, I think you mean "androgynous", not "andronygmous". But I've never thought about using it the way you have so, props to you for thinking of that! Hope you don't mind, but I'd like to use that for my own story. It's such a small thing, but that just went right over my head when I was thinking of ways to describe my own character.