Your Forever Is All That I Need - Comments

guess who? :3 guess? maybe? ok then....dont...i get it...

wowww spoopyyy

I wasn't telling you to change your writing; I was telling you that I thought you could improve by fixing your simple spelling and grammar errors that could easily be fixed by running your document through a spell check on microsoft word.

@ Maddi;
mhmmm... you commented on my friend's story, and she was sort of mad. I like peoples writings the way it is. You specifically may not like it, but a lot of other people do. I dont change my story for one person's opinion, nobody really should.

Okay, well I was just trying to give you some tips on how to make your writing of better quality so more people will read and like it.

@ Maddi;
i like writing it the way it is. Sorry, but that was no help.

There were a few things I noticed in this story that could use a bit of improving.

First, you need to make sure you capitalize correctly. There are several places where "i" isn't capitalized, and that is and easily fixed mistake.

You also don't use apostrophes in your contractions like don't, can't, etc. That is another simple mistake that you need to work on.

I also wasn't a big fan of how the whole first chapter was just an information dump about the main character's life. It didn't really hold my attention and didn't make me want to read anymore of the story. Try spacing out your information and use it as a part of the story instead of just like a textbook.

way better at writing than me XD

O.o i just figured out u made this...

@ atl-ptv-hellyeah
i know, im tired of them being gay, so i gave it a change :D

@ MeowzersKitty
lol i know :D

omg finally its not them being gay and stuff. thank you!

I think it's really good so far! I'm happy there's gonna be a fic where they're just best friends