My Annoying Celebrity Roommate - Comments

@ IceDeath.
Hahahaha, yeah, I didn't wanna traumatise her. :P
Yes! I'll update asap!
Thanks for reading.

Haha. I thought she was gonna get raped or something. It's good that she didn't...Lol. :) Update again soon okay!!

@ hawker!
Thank you sooooo much! I'm really glad you liked the story! And also, I'm really happy that you recommended it, it means a lot to me.
Hahaha, I'll be posting the next chapter soon, you'll find out what happens to Kiara then. :P
As for the points you pointed out, I'll un-censor the curse words, and I'll try to do something about the text.
Thank you once again for your awesome comment. :D

I have a total weakness for narrators that break the fourth wall, so when Kiara does it, I can't help but smile! You have a really interesting way with words, and this story is really quirky, cute, and upbeat - save for that cliffhanger at the end of chapter three, which makes me hope that she's alright! D:
I did notice that you censored the word "damn" in the first chapter, but I just wanted to let you know that you don't have to censor swears here on Mibba; just rate it accordingly. And there's another little layout-related thing that I noticed: the text seemed a bit blurred, and after a while it can get hard on the eyes. I know it's an option in the layout maker, but it can hurt a little. But those are little things, and overall this is really funny and I hope you keep up the awesome work! :D

@ SadieJBlue

Hi! I'm really glad you enjoyed.
Yay! You noticed that part haha. I'm glad you found it unique and feels it fits in with the story.
No problem, it's happened to me before too. I read something, then get distracted too.
Thanks for coming back to check it out, for subscribing and recommending it! It means a lot. :)

@ VeronaViridian
That is a great compliment for me! If you are grinning like that in front of your laptop, it must mean I'm going in the right direction with the humour hahaha. :D
I'm really glad you liked it and want more, and I'll be updating real soon.
I hope you enjoy the story along the way, if you continue reading it. :)

@ Fonetik Frases.
Hey, thanks for your comment! I'm still a bit disorientated around this site, so I wasn't sure how to make it look nicer, but your layout suggestion definitely helped.
I'll re-edit it and work on the punctuation.
And I'm glad you found it had humour, that is one of the main genre's of my story.
Thanks again for your comment!

Hello,
I found this story yesterday I believe it was and I really enjoyed it. The style is so unique especially the way the main character takes notice of the author. Its a quirky touch and in this story it works so well. When you commented on my story I decided to come back and comment on yours which I probably should have done in the first place but I got distracted by something shiny >.< My bad. But! I love it, really, I can't honestly wait but to follow this - so you've earned yourself a new subscriber. Love, Sadie x

OMG! You make me laugh! I'm sitting here grinning at the computer screen like an idiot! Yes, that is a compliment!
I can't wait to see where this is going, and the anticipation is killing me. . "What could he have told her?" I keep asking myself . .

Please do keep on writing!

~ Verona :)

Comment Swap:

You should get a layout, and work on punctuation. Maybe go into more description, um jeez... you don't have a lot to comment on yet so like I can't give a real analysis.. but keep it up, you have humor! That is always a good thing to have!

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@ Kaaren Nafar
Hi!
Thanks a lot for your comment. I made the changes you mentioned. I hadn't noticed the mistakes, my bad!
And instead of saying she "flared" her hands or anything, I just stuck to "swayed". :]

I'm really glad you liked this chapter, and am more happy that you didn't find Kiara annoying. Finding a balance between a funny character and a silly-sounding character can be hard, so I really appreciate you mentioning it. :)

I did enjoy this one. I just read the first chapter for now. It was smart and funny. And As I was reading it, I was reminded of the character of Dante in the game Devil May Cry. I like her boyish character. And the first chapter is interesting enough to keep the reader going. Good job
In style, I walked out of the apartment, pretending that I had not been kicked out, but was just moving out. (Funny :D)
Something else I liked about it is that the narrative was not annoying at all. I could connect with her and understand her situation and not hate her as the same time.
Errors:
Any comments: What kind of idiotic form is this? Its full of obvious questions, its really annoying for us story characters. (Both -its- should be -it’s-)
I had jut moved to England from America, Chicago to be more precise. (jut=just)
I had a huge house,an amazing dog whom I called HOT (after ‘house,’ and ‘ an’ you need a space)
Yeap, lets just not go into the family part. (lets=Let’s)
"We're really sorry Ms Kiara Lodge….” (After Ms, you need a period)
I flaired my hands dramatically into the air and smacked my face. (flaired is wrong. I think you mean flared)
"Ok! Ok! I'll go now!" I exclaimed, flustered by her feriocity. (feriocity=ferocity)