First of all, I like the layout. I prefer self-made layouts, so that's definitely good! And it's readable, too. You also followed all of the rules, thank you for that. You spaced everything out, but in my opinion, it's a bit too spaced out. Leave a line open when a new person speaks, which you did, but I think some lines could've been in one paragraph.
So now the most important part. I liked the one-shot. I like what you did with the secret. It was well-written. Your grammar and spelling is very good, and you were also consequent with the tense you used. Good!
So overall you did a great job. You can always learn to improve, but everyone can. I liked it!
You also followed all of the rules, thank you for that. You spaced everything out, but in my opinion, it's a bit too spaced out. Leave a line open when a new person speaks, which you did, but I think some lines could've been in one paragraph.
So now the most important part. I liked the one-shot. I like what you did with the secret. It was well-written. Your grammar and spelling is very good, and you were also consequent with the tense you used. Good!
So overall you did a great job. You can always learn to improve, but everyone can. I liked it!