August 16th, 2015 at 10:55am
(Comment swap reader)
Hello! Firstly, I rather enjoy the clever reversal of "occult" for the town's name. However, as Kaaren stated, the story is a tad confusing, I had to read over a few parts. My best suggestion for that and the grammatical errors would be to look into getting a beta. However, I do rather enjoy the idea of supernatural beings clashing with The Night's Eye. The idea for the werebear is creative as well. I also enjoyed the twist at the end of chapter one. Can't wait to see you improve and continue writing dude!
Hey there, it's been awhile since I last came on this site. I just stumbled across my story and I'm thinking if I should continue writing this story or drop it lol. Do you all think I should continue ? I mean I do have some amazing twists planned but Oh well.